Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, with this galloping rate of sophisticated skills needed for demanding jobs and limited time that everyone has to gain these abilities, discipline is one of the crucial facets of being successful. As far as the future of the young people is concerned, some are of the opinion that they have to be organized, while others believe otherwise. I-for one-subscribe to the first idea on the ground that they can have concentration, learn some aspects of working, and can also manage their school and other activities.
To begin with, Being organized and having a definite plan in the life, juveniles can focus on their works. To be more specific, lack of a particularly purposed program for the future would waste the most precious gift of life-time. Therefore, young people should have a goal and a schedule for achieve to that goal. For example, when I was studying for the entrance exam of the university, at the first I did not have any special plan to read and it was a source of confusion for me, because although I was trying hard but it was not in an efficient way. Eventually, I scheduled my time and it pave the way for me to success.
Secondly, all the time in school or in recreation activities, teenagers live in a different world. As a result, it would be extremely difficult for them to keep tune to the pace of the hectic life of future. Being an organized person would assist them to become more familiar with the future life, like working that requires discipline.
Last but not least, there are miscellaneous means for the young people to find their talents and abilities these days. However these various options is an advantageous, looking on the dark side of this issue we can realize that it can be a source of confusion for them. Hence, it is mandatory for the students to be organized to deal with their school works and other activities like sports or attending in clubs.
All in all, taken into account what was already mentioned, I do believe that children must be disciplined and have a definite purpose in their young ages, so they can have focus on their works, get ready for future, and cope with their diverse activities. Being organized is obligatory for all young people these days.
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Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient way" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...though I was trying hard but it was not in an efficient way. Eventually, I scheduled my time and it...
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Message: Did you mean 'paves'?
Suggestion: paves
... Eventually, I scheduled my time and it pave the way for me to success. Secondly, a...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...their talents and abilities these days. However these various options is an advantageou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72493573265 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65487366197 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52442159383 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2528441075 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.875 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17684610964 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685211909976 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378690779843 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105693355099 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365419702631 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.