Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Getting high marks in school by children is all parents' heart desire, in which they put any affort they can. One of the most important factors that can affect
children's grade in school is their incentive for learning lessons. As far as stimulation of children for reading their lessons is concerned, some are of the opinion that
giving money as a present for getting high marks would be an appropriat way to achieve this goal, while others belive otherwise. I- for one- subscribe to the latter idea.
The reasons why I believe so are maifold- three of which, however are of great consequences: giving money would not be an ever-lasting incentive, children may associate
reading lessons with money that can has a detrimental effect, and money can not demonstrate the value of their achivement.
To beging with, rewarding money to children in return for their good scores may be at first very valueable for them and provoke them to attempt more, but after aa while
getting money can not be as effective as it was initially. For instance, students find gaining monet intresting and they try to get money by other ways rather than reading
lessons, in order to obtain more money.
Second, by this way children associate reading their books with gaining more income, and this can be a disappointment for them in the future. To be more specific,
children would not try to practice functional use of their knowledge. Nowadays, occupations and professions need specialist instead of theoriticians. So children most know
that merely reading their lessons would not be paid in the future.
Last but not least, money is not a decent reward for the students hard work to get high grades. They should know being literate and obtaining knowledge is invaluable.
For example, if they consider the money and the knoledge in same value, a stupendous achievement in their future would be unattainable.
All in all, I do belive that money can not be a peoper incentive for children to read their lessons. they should given a present that can be a permanent stimulation for
them, aware them that learning their lessons is not the only prerequisite for gaining money in the future, be a decent identification of their precious work.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
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Message: Did you mean 'have given' or 'give'?
Suggestion: have given; give
...dren to read their lessons. they should given a present that can be a permanent stimu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1858.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95466666667 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71371823642 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490666666667 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.6428426258 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.125 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4375 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 15.0 4.53405017921 331% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285411317102 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11156076689 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574553000376 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111017130131 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538403927324 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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