TPO 47 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life

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TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

In today's modern world with developed technology and facilities people can readily obtain any news around the world. Media like newspapers, television, internet, etc. are replete with all kinds of news from around the world. As far as reading news is concerned some are of the opinion that we should know all the news and be informed all the time, while others believe otherwise. I-for one- subscribe to the latter idea on the ground that keeping up with all the coming information will waste our precious time, exert pressure on us, and disturb our concentration.
First and foremost, time is the most valuable gift of life, which everybody wants it to spend as effectively as possible, especially in the modern world of today with its galloping progress. For example, I used to check world news every day at my work, from politics to sports. After a while, I realized that I couldn't do my tasks in time and I had to work some extra hours to compensate. Therefore, I quit that habit and after that I didn't need to stay late at work.
Secondly, reading all news of the world will definitely brings us huge mental stresses since we will get worried about all matters, some of which is not even relevant to us. For instance, following the news of wars and disease from all corners of world will have a detrimental effect of our mental health. It has been proved by scientific researches that bad news can impose stress on the reader's unconscious, even if they think that they are not paying much attention to it.
The last but not the least reason which reinforces the preceding assertion that being informed about all the news is not beneficial for people is that it would be source that will not allow people to focus on their work. Again consider my personal experience in following news as an example, when I was reading sport news, I always wanted to know the sport game results and tried to reach that information by checking the sport news websites. As a result, it was very difficult for me to concentrate on my works and that was a huge impediment for me to be successful in my career.
All in all, taken into account what was already mentioned, I do believe that being informed about all events happening around the world has an unfavorable impact on people's life since it would take so much time, they will get nervous, and they will not be able to focus properly on their important issues. Thus, wouldn't it be nice if we use our valuable time as effectively as we can and be relieved and can concentrate enough on our work instead of simply having knowledge about world news?

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 311, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ports. After a while, I realized that I couldnt do my tasks in time and I had to work s...
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Line 2, column 435, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ore, I quit that habit and after that I didnt need to stay late at work. Secondly, r...
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Line 3, column 57, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
...g all news of the world will definitely brings us huge mental stresses since we will g...
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Line 5, column 312, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...operly on their important issues. Thus, wouldnt it be nice if we use our valuable time ...
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Line 5, column 323, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...heir important issues. Thus, wouldnt it be nice if we use our valuable time as eff...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2129.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61822125813 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49796431346 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507592190889 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.2860174651 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.235294118 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1176470588 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162356996285 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571247834172 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481372536978 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0989934162724 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417343125821 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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