Young children nowadays are becoming more and more independent than in the history. The days that children are supported by their parents are gone and it is vital for young generations to stand on their feet and stand out to succeed in this complex society. I agree, this present life is filled with complexity that young people need to possess the quality of planning and organizing. I feel this way for young adults that save time.
On the one hand, planning and organizing takes precedence in everything people do in their life. From the day the teenagers enter the world of work and study, they need careful planning and organizing in order to perform well in school and work. For instance, when I was doing post-secondary education, I took careful planning in choosing the course that interests me to pursue the career that I want to be. Hence, beginning from high school years I met my high school counselors and planned what are the prerequisites to be a nurse. I chose the correct math as calculus in grade 11 and grade 12. Also, I was working at a hospital as a greeter and helper to make new patients comfortable of finding the correct places in a huge hospital building. As a result, when I applied for nursing course, I got into the nursing program at the first shot since I completed the correct math and obtained experience at an hospital. My classmates that opted math in high school years since they thought in order to do medicine field of studies they don't need math. They realize math was one prerequisite and hospital experience also counts to get admission into medical college. Many of them did not get into medical college because of incomplete prerequisite courses and work experience. Hence, the all prerequisites and applied for post-secondary medical institution. In the mean time, I completed one year of nursing course. Because of my careful planning and organizing in school years, I was able to get into the program right away. Hence, I did not waste any time in pursuing my career. After completing the nursing program, I was hired as a nurse in the same hospital where I was working as a part-time student.
On the other hand, people that do not plan well ahead and go with flow in this complex suffer by wasting lots of precious time. My friends experience is a compelling example of this situation. When he was in high school, he was working as a part-time job at McDonald restaurant . Since, he was much interested in earning money; he did not pay attention to studies rather he spent most of the time working by skipping schools. As a result, gradually he started working as full-time employee at McDonald. Since, he ended up in McDonald for minimum wage which was not enough for my friend to run a happy life. Hence, he was looking for a career such as a engineer that could pay him well. However, since he didn't do well in school and only graduated from school with minimum pass mark, he wasn't able to get into the career that he really wishes to. As a result, he went to adult school to do his grade 12 subjects and graduated from high school with high scores. Moreover, my friend wasted lots of time because of not planning his career path. If he planned well ahead, he could have ended up in a career that could lead him to get paid well and settled in life.
In conclusion, careful planning and organizing accordingly would lead to a successful life without wasting any time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
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...ccessful life without wasting any time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, hence, however, if, look, moreover, really, second, so, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2824.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 607.0 407.700716846 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65238879736 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96360453597 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59157087732 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443163097199 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 865.8 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0836965673 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0967741935 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5806451613 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29032258065 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135969555212 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427799961065 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449191999308 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964757862613 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435932187507 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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