People make friends if their interests and characteristics correlate with someone that has the similar to theirs. People in the past had many opportunities to meet other human being and found those similarities and they became many friends. I agree people in the ancient time were friendlier when compared than the present modern day life. I feel this way because of less human attraction between people with the interference of technology.
First and foremost, people nowadays don’t want to leave the comfort of their home as they are too much attached with their gadgets. Moreover, people never get bored being at one spot since they are fully occupied with their online world such as face book, Instagram, twitter and countless social media that are on the spurge.. As a result, they never get a chance to meet people in person to develop friendship in close proximity. For instance, one might have thousands of friends on face book but in reality they don’t have a true friend that can physically come and help them in times of need. Recently in our neighboring apartment, we had a family that suffered from break-in enter theft. The intruder pretended that he was someone like that was living in the home and stole everything in a truck as if he was moving out of the apartment. No one in the apartment really noticed anything strange was going in the apartment campus until the family returned home in the evening from work was so shocked to see that their home was empty and everything that they possessed was all gone in a day. They family was left in despair and devastated both mentally and financially. On top of that, they couldn’t even claim anything because they did not have any eye-witness that can describe the thieves. This situation could have been avoided if they have made any friends that are in close proximity within their dwelling place.
On the other hand, there was no room for such an unpleasant moment could take place in the past as people in the neighborhood community know each other inside out. People in those days had various opportunities to meet community members. For instance, when I was growing-up we used to have block parties where we had chance to meet other members in our community. As a result, we developed great relationship with many families in the neighborhood. As a result, we all carpooled to school and spent our weekends together. Moreover, we shared sweets and greetings during Christmas. Hence, our friendship grew and strengthened in a long run . As a result, we had a chance to get to know everyone in our block. To illustrate this situation, when we were young, our house broke into flames in the middle of night. Our smoke alarm malfunctioned and did not indicate us and we were in deep sleep in our bedroom which was on the third floor. Fortunately, our neighbor who witnessed the fire called us using her phone and we were able to escape the fire. Later, fireman arrived to put off the fire in the house. We wouldn’t have survived without that neighbor's timely phone call that saved our lives.
In conclusion, this present world suffers from lack of friendliness that impacts them negatively which was not the case in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, moreover, really, so, then, third, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2668.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 553.0 407.700716846 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82459312839 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64360518229 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517179023508 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 821.7 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2792752165 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2857142857 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144348732094 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404423575055 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514050582188 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0938319407804 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055005220394 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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