With the invention of many technological advances, it is possible to get all information that happening in the world with a click of a button. Many sources bring several events that take place globally. In my opinion, I disagree that it is crucial to know every vents that is occurring in the vast world. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, getting to know all the information taking place around the world would make a person overwhelmed with the amount of information that goes around in the world. As a result, a human being cannot function efficiently if he listens to irrelevant information to her or his. So, it is always advisable to pay attention to the events that attributes to their interest and needs. For instance, I live in Canada, so I only pay close attention to the daily events that happens in my country rather than knowing the events that has been taking place in a faraway country. For example, I love watching hockey games. Hence, I tune into media to watch where next game will be played nationally and only pay attention to these events. Some occasion, I plan to go watch these game with friends and it makes me more involved in the events that I can relate to. I However, I would not pay attention to other games as it is not going to benefit me anyways.
Secondly, getting to know everything happening globally is a waste of time. That quality time could be spent on other things that is more crucial to someone to have a successful life. Instead, events that will impact directly will be given more importance. For instance, recently I traveled to Britain for official reasons. Hence, I watched BBC news before I actually flew to Britain. This helped me to pack my clothes that were appropriate to the weather in London during winter months. As a result, I was able to survive winter storm that took place right after I landed in London. I would not have packed winter jacket without checking the weather. Moreover, I made arrangements to stay closer to the airport since roadways were severely affected by inclement weather conditions.
In conclusion, it is more vital to pay close attention to events that are relevant and affect you directly for above mentioned reasons. It is impossible and waste of time to watch events that takes place globally.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, anyway, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70873786408 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58562938373 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529126213592 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5522991315 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.347826087 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9130434783 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47826086957 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167104143779 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432403725194 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422819808688 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107069623147 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359006084708 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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