Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’s development
Nowadays, there is a debate among parents whether children have to spend their time with technological devices or not. In my opinion, children must be away from technology and do simpler activities. That is due to increasing the social connection, physical activities making them healthier and they must accept their mistakes in real life.
First and foremost, when children obligate to play with their friends, they must learn how make a good connection; therefore, it is the cause of improving their interrelation. In other words, the children among their entertainments will be trainded social relationship by other friends. For example, when I was a student in primary school, one of my friends had been quited on everydays. After my investigation, I knew that he has been alone at home for 5 years because he was single child. thus, he could not make relation with other children. Thus, having time with other friends make you more sociable.
Second, I think that physical activities have an important role in our healthy. To put it differently, when you play outside and your plays are needed exercise, you will be able to have a healthy body. For instance, I had had a healthy body before I quitted playing soccer in our school. Consequently, the physical activities help to be healthier instead of entertainments related to technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 491, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...or 5 years because he was single child. thus, he could not make relation with other ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1124.0 1977.66487455 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 222.0 407.700716846 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06306306306 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94510553624 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621621621622 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 342.0 618.680645161 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6158525138 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4615384615 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0769230769 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15384615385 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223911827074 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795058443259 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471259097474 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143656650988 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0250100416656 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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