Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’ s development
There is no doubt that technology is rapidly progressing these days in a vast variety of fields including entertainment. All kids' games are changed these days due to technology yet, I believe that Kids should still spend more time playing outside with friends and even playing with not complicated toys. I believe in this for two reasons that I am going to explore in this essay.
To commence with, kids' Playing different games outside with friends, affect their sociability. First, when kids play together, they need to communicate with each other all the time, which would build their communication skills. For example, in a group of kids deciding to play a game, although there are different opposing ideas, they eventually choose one game to play. It means they learn to talk about their opinion and defend it, however finally they go with the one that majority accept. Second, they learn teamwork through playing with friends. That is because, in some huge number of games, they become two or three groups playing against each other. And, they learn the fact that if a group wins or loses, not an individual. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My aunt has two sons. The first one used to be out playing with his friends all the time. On the other hand, the second one used to play video games all the time. At the school, the first one has lots of friends and is able to communicate well with teachers as well as students, despite the other one could not make any friends and experiences a hard time even asking his teachers a question.
In addition, the other important benefit of playing outside, versus computer games is that children stay healthier because of their more physical activities. Indeed, while kids are playing outside with friends, they usually play games including running, jumping, and so on. These physical activities, despite not doing any exercises, have a great impaction on their health. For instance, my brother and I are twins. I used to play different games out, while he was playing video games at home every evening. He had neither plaid out with us, nor had done any exercises. Now at the age of 30 he has obesity and is not able to run over 15 minutes. Nevertheless, having those childhood activities, I am in shape and able to run at least an hour.
In conclusion, personally I am of the opinion that kids need to play outside whit friends to enhance their different abilities. It is because of the sociability effect it has and because of the great physical impact it has on their future life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, well, while, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74157303371 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51104868216 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498876404494 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.165473539 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26771301919 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782435605908 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067782374422 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157471326482 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552817673904 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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