Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’s development
Nowadays, there is a debate among parents whether children have to spend their time with technological devices or not. In my opinion, children must be away from technology and do simpler activities. That is due to increasing the social connection, physical activities making them healthire and they must accept their mistakes in real life.
First and foremost, when children obligate to play with their friends, they must learn how make a good connection; therefore, it is the cause of improving their interrelation. In other words, the children among their entertainments will be trained social relationship by other friends. For example, when I was a student in primary school, one of my friends had been quitted on everydays. After my investigation, I knew that he has been alone at home for 5 years because he was single child. Thus, he could not make relation with other children. Thus, having time with other friends make you more sociable.
Second, I think that physical activities have an important role in our healthy. To put it differently, when you play outside and your plays are needed exercise, you will be able to have a healthy body. For instance, I had had a healthy body before I quitted playing soccer in our school. Consequently, the physical activities help to be healthier instead of entertainments related to technology.
Last but not least, the children must be prepare for their future life. Indeed, when children play in real life, they maybe make mistake, or deconstruction somethings and their parents obligate them for their wrong behavior; hence, they must be responsible for their activities or solve them. For example, twenty years ago, I was the cause of deconstruction one of the devices of my brother; thus, I must obligated to fix that. this event become the cause that I learned how must build somethings that it become destroyed. Therefore, as an old saying says, " if a hard event do not kill you, you will become stronger."
As outlined above, I definitely disagree with limiting children to do technological activities. That is because they must become sociable and to be healthier rather than another situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 428, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07282913165 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92439389539 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0452424162 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3157894737 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7894736842 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15789473684 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248469291184 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811506517716 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544109670001 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144149568552 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205054092864 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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