Do You agree or disagree with the following statement?
Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outsite with friends would be better for children’s development.
There is no doubt that technology is affecting everyone's life constantly. Technology has revolutionized the way we learn, travel, work and socialize. Computers, smartphones and video games have changed children's entertainment as well. Most kids prefer to play video games instead of playing with their friends outside. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether playing outside would be better for children's development or not. Some people may have this viewpoint that if kids spend too much time on computers and smartphone, it can affect their lives in many aspects. However, some others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that using technology for entertaining children is better for their development.
One of the reasons coming to mind at first is that playing outside is a simple way for children to exercise. Outside activities like football, volleyball, baseball, and ets, contains a lot of movements which can improve children's health. By playing outside not only they stay away from obesity and overweight, but also they benefit from fresh air and sunlight. As a consequence, their body will be strengthened and they will feel more frisky. Moreover, too much screen time might affect children's eyesight. From this perspective, we can also draw the conclusion that simple outdoor games are better.
Another equally important reason is that by playing outside with their friends, children will learn how to work as a team. Being a team player is one of the important skills that a person should learn from childhood. To illustrate my point, let me provide a personal example. When I was at university, Our professor said to us that you have to work on the course's project in two teams (the team had an equal number of members). In our group, there was a person who managed us and assigned the works to the member. After the project I asked him, how do you know to do like this?, He said that when I was children my parent forced me to play with my friends. Therefore, it is very important for children to play with other kids and spend more time with each other.
Taking all the information factors into account leads one to conclude that children's development would be more upgrade if they play together and do outside activities to be entertained. Although nowadays our lives are more dependent on technology and children is also affected by these changes, but Using computers and playing video game might be harmful for their health. Also, it is a good way to practice for them to strengthen their skills for the future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, no doubt, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96766743649 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70336322867 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521939953811 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7645101887 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5217391304 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8260869565 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4347826087 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330110334942 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944456110044 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758439722894 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209051293931 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419862298646 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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