Undoubtedly, the development of economy is quite important for a society because it provides people with material basis of the better life quality. However, there are some other and perhaps more important things that the government should concern about. I could hardly agree more with the statement that the government should concentrate more budgets on environmental protection. And the fundamental and deeper discussions are illustrated as follows.
To begin with, environmental problems require more investment compared to economic development. For one thing, to protect environment, the government should attempt to expand public green area by planting trees. It means that the government has to raise a large amount of money to purchase plant seeds and hire a huge number of people to plant the seeds. For another, plenty of money is expected to use on the encouragement of inventions related to environmental protection. For instance, the inventions of renewable energy may completely replace the fossil fuels and contribute greatly to the air purification, which can provide people with a better living condition. To achieve this goal, the government should invest more on scientific research to encourage scientists to continuously study the problem. In contrast, the development of economy does not need such large amount of investment. What the government should do is to continuously carry out policies that can really help boost the whole economy and supervise every individual economic participant. These are some tasks that require relatively less money. Accordingly, environmental problems should receive more investment than economic development from the government.
In addition, protecting environment can bring about long-term benefits for both human beings and development of economy. Better environment can not only provide people with a life protection, but also offer the government extra chances to obtain profits. It is undoubted that investment in environmental protection could give us a guarantee of lifetime safety. This is mainly because better environment means that we could have better air condition and cleaner water, which can contribute to a comparatively healthier life for us. As for making profits, taking tourism as an example, if a country is pollution free and beautiful, it can attract a huge number of tourists from all over the world. The development of tourism can also bring about more business for the country, which can contribute to the economic development. Therefore, if the government firstly focuses on the investment of solutions to environmental problems, it could also be beneficial for economy.
To sum up, from what we have discusses, we may safely conclude that investing more on environmental problems than economic development is a rather wise decision for the government because the protection of environment indeed needs more budgets and better environment could produce long-term benefits for both human beings and economic development of the society.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, as for, as to, for instance, in addition, in contrast, for one thing, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 43.0 8.0752688172 532% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2566.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57826086957 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08493810314 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486956521739 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 811.8 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7034147992 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.636363636 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9090909091 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95454545455 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210753612559 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716671241792 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724059408631 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146016568153 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455200719411 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 58.1214874552 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 10.1575268817 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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