Diverse kinds of facilities could be used in students' dormitories for the improvement of their life quality. Some students claim that a specific room for study or entertainment could bring about certain benefits. However, I could hardly agree more that it is rather wiser to build an exercise room in dorm. Fundamental and further discussions are illustrated as follows.
An exercise room in dorms can bring some benefits for students. It is quite important for students to do regular exercise to maintain healthy. Currently, students are generally busy with their assignments and projects every day. they are stressed out in their daily life and really need a suitable way to release the pressure of study. Doing exercise could be a good choice for relaxation because they cannot only relax their muscles but also build up strength so that they could have better health conditions which could be further beneficial for their study. However, if they are only able to go to exercise clubs out of campus, the cost could be a financial burden for them. In the meantime, in raining or snowing days, they may find it hard to access to clubs so it is possible that they just give up exercising now and then. Those problems could be solved if an exercise room could be established in dorms. Students can enjoy exercising without wasting time on the way to clubs and they can exercise regardless of the weather, it could further inspire them to exercise actively.
By contrast, it is not practical to build a study room or entertainment room in dorms. A study room could be a good place for students who still want to study when they come back to the dormitory. However, it could be really noisy in dorms and students who want to continue to study may find it difficult to concentrate on study and their learning efficiency could be low. As for a room for entertainment, it might help some students to relax themselves. Nevertheless, it is likely that some students would stay up late there to watch movies, play video games and so on. It could cause other students are not able to rest well. Thus, both of the two ideas are not advisable.
To sum up, from what we have discussed above, we may safely conclude that building an exercise room in the dormitory is a better option. This is because it provides students with an easier way to do exercise which could be beneficial for their health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...eir assignments and projects every day. they are stressed out in their daily life an...
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Line 3, column 759, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'club'.
Suggestion: club
...ays, they may find it hard to access to clubs so it is possible that they just give u...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, then, thus, well, as for, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75480769231 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60397237934 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475961538462 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0542742592 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9090909091 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40909090909 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292898726292 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10687510885 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641972145612 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21464601624 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495320236122 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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