The government wants to fund one of the following areas to improve children's education. Which one do you think is better? Why?- hire more teachers to teach in a small class- make preschool education before kindergarten mandatory- provide some training co

Undoubtedly, there are many possible factors that can influence the educational quality, such as the number of teachers, preschool education and so on. However, there are some, and perhaps more important things, that governments should allocate funds to enhance the quality of education. I could hardly agree more with the statement that local councils should fund additional training for current teachers. The fundamental and deeper discussions are illustrated as follows.

To begin with, providing additional training for teachers can be beneficial for students since teachers are able to improve their teaching methods. To be more specific, if teachers have unique teaching styles, it will draw students’ attention and greatly boost students' learning enthusiasm. In this circumstance, students are more willing to spend time in studying and searching for various kinds of information related to their favorite subjects, hence having a deep and comprehensive understanding of knowledge. What’s more, supposing that professors teach students in a more systematic way and know where key points are, it would enhance students' study efficiency contributing to mastering their professional knowledge. Consequently, students are more likely to achieve optimum learning if additional training is provided for teachers. Hence, there is every reason to believe that teachers' extra training should receive more investments from governments to enhance educational quality.

In addition, it is not practical to improve teaching quality by hiring more teachers or providing more preschool education. For one thing, it is not cost-effective to hire more teachers since the total salaries would be much higher. In the meantime, the increasing number of teachers might lead to the decrease in teaching quality since there is not enough training could be provided for them. Therefore, educational quality is not able to achieve an improvement in this way. For another thing, preschool education can be a burden for students and even lead to negative impacts on the quality of education. Students' learning ability tends to decline if they attend preschool study since they are so busy with classes that they might lose their interests in learning. As a result, it is possible that they are not able to develop awareness of active learning, which could be unbeneficial for long-term study.

To sum up, from what we have discussed, we may safely conclude that investing on additional training for teachers is a rather wise decision for governments compared to other choices. This is because it can help improve students' learning enthusiasm, which can further enhance students' learning quality.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, another thing, in addition, such as, as a result, for another thing, for one thing, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2285.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57317073171 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94241884738 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6026020199 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.263157895 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5789473684 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.10526315789 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218556795935 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808592265398 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596848110923 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134830923656 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043781418283 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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