Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments and private companies should share their scientific discoveries with the rest of the world.

It is undoubtedly that certain scientific inventions or discoveries play significant roles in development of society. Some people claim that it is advisable for governments and businesses to keep scientific discoveries secret. However, I could hardly agree more with the statement that those discoveries should be shared among scientists because it can contribute to improvement of people's lives.

To begin with, sharing discoveries of new energy can help protect the environment. Nowadays, people rely too much on traditional carbon-based fuels, which leads to the production of industrial emissions. People might get diseases due to the emissions. For example, industrial waste water could pollute drinking water and corps and people who consume them would have stomach problems. Therefore, sharing of scientific discoveries could help popularize the use of new clean energy to solve environmental problems. Taking auto industry as an example, if some companies which own certain technology to use new energy could share their discoveries with other scientist, clean fuels can be used on more cars to reduce exhaust emission which could be beneficial for protection of environment. However, if those companies choose not to share their new technology, the environment problems resulted from the use of traditional fuels would not be able to be solved in a short term, which could cause negative impacts on the health of future generations.

In addition, if scientific discoveries could be shared among scientists from diverse backgrounds, it can improve medical care greatly especially in those development countries. For one thing, nowadays, the high cost of medical treatment puts significant pressure on people. Sharing new technologies related to medicine or medical instruments can render the treatment cheaper than before, thus financial burden of people could be alleviated. For another, a large number of diseases currently are not able to be cured in many development countries and the death rate is extremely high. If scientific sharing could be carried out, then healthcare plans of developed countries could be popularized which might help millions of patients. It can significantly decrease the death rate in development countries which can further bring about benefits to social stability. By contrast, if governments of developed countries keep medical discoveries secret, the society of those development countries might become chaotic due to relatively high death rate and it could even lead to wars.

To sum up, we may safely conclude that it is better to share scientific discoveries among scientists worldwide instead of keeping them secret. This is because scientific sharing can not only be beneficial to environmental protection, but also help the improvement of medical care.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 455, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...eople could be alleviated. For another, a large number of diseases currently are not able to be c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, for one thing, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 9.8082437276 265% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2386.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58782201405 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03278598103 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503512880562 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8595176866 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.578947368 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4736842105 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173024260718 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636732366267 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600984725041 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134548148319 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696476467787 0.0645574589148 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 10.9000537634 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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