You school want to improve the quality of students’ life in the dormitory. Which one of the following do you think the school should build in dorms?
1. Quiet study area
2. exercise room for students to keep physical well-being
3. room for entertainment
At the turn of the new century, with the development of human's modern society, there is no doubt that education has a pivotal role in blooming and thriving a society. Actually, some students leave their hometown and go to other cities or even abroad to chase their academic objectives. Most of these students tend to live in dormitory during their studies. Although some students adhere to this belife that university should improve dormitories' facilities by building a quiet study area or a exercies room for students, in my vantage point, buliding a room for entertainment can be highly beneficial since it makes students more lively, and also they can fortify their social skills.
The first aspect to point out is that what provokes university to build an entertainment room is making students more energetic. As a matter of fact,students need to take a break from their hectic life and unwind by have sheer hours of happiness. It is axiomatic that university can make students delighted by providing wide variety of enjoynments. In this way, not only can students shed their tension, but also they can refresh their minds. Take a case of a despondent student who is overwhelmed by stress in exam's night and he needs refreshment for instance, so he can relieve his stress by playing computer games or watching his favorite movies; Hence, an entertainment room can bolster students' morale.
The further subtle point is that strengthening social skills can be considered another advantage of building an entertaiment room. It is absolutely undeniable that students need to enhance their social skills such as talking in public and self-confidence to make progress in their acadeic lives. Undobtedly, in an entertainment room students can get familiar with diffrent students who have divers viewpoints and attitudes toward lives. Also, they can spend time with each other, share their ideas, enrich their knowledge and enrich their horizons. Im my own experience, when I was student, I feel lack of confidence and I had introverted personality; However after I got familier with a student in the entertainment room, she helped me to raise my self-confidence. Consequently, I can start up a conversation with a stranger while I feel confident.
On the whole, according to the above-mentioned details and points, it is crystal clear that building an entertainment room is useful because it makes students more energetic as well as fortifing their social skills. It is high time overlooking the fact that students just should study hard in the period of university in order to have promising future. Have you ever seen a prosper person without enough hours of happiness? Can you consider a person successful without enough self-confidence? I absolutely believe no!
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , students
...ents more energetic. As a matter of fact,students need to take a break from their hectic ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...ir knowledge and enrich their horizons. Im my own experience, when I was student, ...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ve promising future. Have you ever seen a prosper person without enough hours of happines...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'as for', 'for instance', 'i feel', 'no doubt', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact', 'as well as', 'on the whole']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.249492900609 0.229887763892 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.156186612576 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0851926977688 0.0866891130778 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0486815415822 0.046263068375 105% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0811359026369 0.0685040099705 118% => OK
Prepositions: 0.119675456389 0.118717715034 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0425963488844 0.0351676179071 121% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.02561390667 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0243407707911 0.0309702414327 79% => OK
Particles: 0.00405679513185 0.00188951952338 215% => OK
Determiners: 0.0770791075051 0.0887237588012 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0283975659229 0.0209618222197 135% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00811359026369 0.0139019557991 58% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2764.0 2387.08602151 116% => OK
No of words: 449.0 408.028673835 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.15590200445 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.387527839644 0.338922669872 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.289532293987 0.251872472559 115% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.220489977728 0.174417080927 126% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.133630289532 0.112833075102 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02561390667 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559020044543 0.524397521467 107% => OK
Word variations: 67.1366188076 59.2087087015 113% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.45 20.5533526081 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.5442414376 48.84282405 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.2 120.699889404 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.45 20.5533526081 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.05 0.644075263715 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 51.4032293987 45.7405998639 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.43971631206 1.45489161554 99% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33692350356 0.300154397459 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0977646885651 0.103427244359 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0902854979175 0.0752933317313 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.43556839904 0.497263757937 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.129181734799 0.151897553556 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11744006878 0.114077575197 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793609765856 0.0781384742642 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.370361624424 0.336927656856 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.037298837971 0.067059652881 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253467233891 0.210909579961 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609554345225 0.0618886996521 98% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.