People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons. Use specific examples and details to support your answer.

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People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons. Use specific examples and details to support your answer.

At the 20th and 21st centuries, with the development of human’s modern society, more and more people tend to work hardly. There is no doubt that one of the most significant reasons of working is accumulating a horde of money to experience independent life. Actually, people’s attitudes toward the reasons for working are widely varied from person to person. In my vantage point, developing social skills as well as improving self-esteem motivates people to work.
The first aspect to point out is that what provokes people to choose a job is improving their social skills. As a matter of fact, the human being is by nature gregarious. It is crystal-clear that in a workplace, people can get familiar with the different person who has diverse viewpoints; also, they can make new friends, spend time with each other and share their ideas. Consider companies which provide some opportunities for its employees to travel abroad for the mission. Not only can they broaden their horizon by socializing with experts, but also they can cement their relationship with their friends during the expedition. To illustrate more, even at the beginning of the trip in order to shed their fears of being in an airplane, for example, they can start a conversation with their colleagues and discuss how they can seize opportunities that are provided for the company in the competitive market or how they can make headway in a long run. Therefore, they can fortify their social skills by working.
Another subtle point is that people can fortify their self-esteem through working. Undoubtedly, in today modern world with its galloping progress, jobs are being specialized and complicated so much so that everyone in charge of a particular job should enjoy a great amount of experience in that field, so working provides an opportunity for people to prove their abilities and feel pleased with themselves. According to recent research conducted in my country, psychologists are in the conviction that person who works 40 hours in a week are by far more confident than an unemployed person. In my own experience, when I graduated from university I could not find a job for 2 years and I had difficult times in that period of time, because I felt that I was a useless person for my society; however, being hired in a company can effectively boosted my moral, and I little by little learned how to struggle for my dreams. That is to say, the sense of accomplishment which is gained from making progress in a job can raise their self-esteem.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...years and I had difficult times in that period of time, because I felt that I was a useless pe...
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'boost'
Suggestion: boost
...eing hired in a company can effectively boosted my moral, and I little by little learne...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'no doubt', 'as a matter of fact', 'as well as', 'that is to say']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.206751054852 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.158227848101 0.158761421928 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.07805907173 0.0866891130778 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0506329113924 0.046263068375 109% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0717299578059 0.0685040099705 105% => OK
Prepositions: 0.145569620253 0.118717715034 123% => OK
Participles: 0.0506329113924 0.0351676179071 144% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.87693079642 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0274261603376 0.0309702414327 89% => OK
Particles: 0.00210970464135 0.00188951952338 112% => OK
Determiners: 0.0801687763713 0.0887237588012 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0274261603376 0.0209618222197 131% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0210970464135 0.0139019557991 152% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2530.0 2387.08602151 106% => OK
No of words: 426.0 408.028673835 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93896713615 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.349765258216 0.338922669872 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.24882629108 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.180751173709 0.174417080927 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.136150234742 0.112833075102 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87693079642 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539906103286 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 62.4504298157 59.2087087015 105% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 26.625 20.5533526081 130% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.1670777204 48.84282405 181% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 158.125 120.699889404 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.625 20.5533526081 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.875 0.644075263715 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.5376344086 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 51.507629108 45.7405998639 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.43609022556 1.45489161554 99% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245886232088 0.300154397459 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.129178459731 0.103427244359 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0880991959209 0.0752933317313 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.484200261732 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.138061950694 0.151897553556 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100435355807 0.114077575197 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538719993594 0.0781384742642 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.366783409997 0.336927656856 109% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.050138819021 0.067059652881 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202883487685 0.210909579961 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0765867059316 0.0618886996521 124% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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