Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If parents want their children to do well at school, theyshould limit the time their children spend on watchingTV.

Essay topics:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

If parents want their children to do well at school, they

should limit the time their children spend on watching

TV.

There is no doubt that nowadays, parents can play a pivotal role in improving children's success in their school. In this regard, the most important question that arises in mind is that whether preventing children from watching TV by their parents is advantageous for their children's success in classes or not. Although some people think that watching TV programs without any limits does not harm youngsters' progress, others, including me, hold this view that there are some benefits of limiting young people by their parents to spent much time watching TV broadcasting.

The first and foremost reason are that children are not aware of the harmful effects of TV, and this is the parents' duty to inform them about the disadvantages of watching TV a lot. To clarify, parents should have their discipline to help their children in their success. One way to contribute to them is to decrease the amount of watching TV. Through this, their children will not face some physical problems in the future, such as eye weakening caused by watching TV at a lower age. Therefore, they can guarantee their health, which is contributing to their future. Take my niece as an example. When she was a child, she spent much time watching cartoons, and she did not care about its health problems. Her mother knew about the problems because when she had gone to a doctor for her baby, the doctor had told her that watching a lot of TVs had awful effects on the baby's eyesight. Had she not controlled the amount of time her daughter watching TV, her daughter's eyesight would have been weakened, and she could not have done her homework correctly.

The other equally reason is that parents, by controlling the amount of time their children watching can direct them to do other activities. If they do not watch TV a lot, they can spend time with their friends, which not only enhances their social abilities, but they can solve their class problems with their friends. As re results, the more they spend time with their friends, the more they can gain information about class materials, so they would get better results at their schools. For example, we can follow this route through some researches that have been done by Tehran university. They divided children into two groups. One group spent time watching a lot of TV programs with no limits and the other group was obliged to watch TV at some specific time. The results were surprising, the group was limited to watch TV had better results in their schools because they had enough time to collaborate with their friends to learn school subjects.

To sum up, I believe that watching TV programs should be controlled by parents. This because not only do parents know better about the negative impact on their children, but youngsters have enough time to work on their school materials with their friends.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
... harmful effects of TV, and this is the parents duty to inform them about the disadvant...
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Line 5, column 936, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to school'
Suggestion: to school
...collaborate with their friends to learn school subjects. To sum up, I believe tha...
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Line 5, column 953, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...their friends to learn school subjects. To sum up, I believe that watching TV pr...
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Line 7, column 257, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ir school materials with their friends.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, therefore, for example, no doubt, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2357.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83983572895 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44166753723 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459958932238 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3630119462 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.238095238 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1904761905 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315858320256 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115260553239 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0972851840198 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237239191802 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611861816375 0.0645574589148 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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