Do you agree or disagree? It is better to travel abroad
to visit different countries when you are younger rather
than when you are older.
There is no doubt that nowadays, traveling to other countries is the most crucial entertainment in everyone's life. In this regard, some people believe that people ought to travel to other countries when they are retirements, so they have enough time and money to enjoy their trips. However, others, including me, think the best time for travel to foreign countries is when people are younger because they can enhance their knowledge and enforce their characters.
The first and foremost reason is that young people can be in touch with other cultures and people, so they acquire plenty of information when they start their relationships with different people. By talking to other people from other nationalities, they would catch this point that all people have the same behaviors. They would figure out that although people live in several geographies, they would not like war or other awful human manners. Through this, their capabilities of socializing with other people would develop, which indeed is one of the most crucial abilities they must have to guarantee their future life. Take one of my friends as an example. He started going to other countries at his younger age, and he found many friends in some countries, which were racially different from their ceremonies and beliefs. However, they could become good friends, and he could learn many things about them. When he began his job in a company, he told me had he not understood other people due to his travels; he could not have made appropriate relationships with his coworkers.
Another similar reason is that youngsters are raw materials, and traveling abroad makes them shape their personalities. During their journeys, they would encounter some unpredictable events, which in turn can build their characters. One of the precious experiments they get is patient. They have some antisocial behavior which ameliorates during their travels. For example, my friend, whom I mentioned in the previous paragraph, was reluctant to help other people when they were in harsh situations. He always said that they should have learned how to cope with their problems. When he went to Pakistan to climb one of the highest mounts there, his feet injured, and some of the group carried him to the nearest hospital. Fortunately, he could recover his health and came back to Iran. As a result of his trip, he learned some valuable traits such as empathy he could not have reached in any other experience.
To sum up, traveling to foreign countries are advantageous when people are at a younger age. This is because not only can they catch much information about different people and cultures, but they can alter some bad behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 668, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...est mounts there, his feet injured, and some of the group carried him to the nearest hospit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, for example, no doubt, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2247.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06081081081 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62716802072 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511261261261 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2181904234 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.136363636 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1818181818 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77272727273 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.086096298352 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0342904848353 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461552848198 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0827017447911 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426859302193 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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