Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Nowadays people are too obsessed with buying or acquiring material things such as expensive clothes or cars because they think that people around them will judge them based on what they possess

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Nowadays, people are too obsessed with buying or
acquiring material things such as expensive clothes or
cars because, they think that people around them will
judge them based on what they possess.

It is universally agreed that cloth and cars have a pivotal role in everyday life and people’s culture. The way people in this modern era contemplate these is highly debated among individuals. In this regard, some people consider cars and cloth of people as a prominent factor to be judged. Others, including me, hold this view that the role of the cloth between people has changed in order to make a pure connection between them and environmental issues. I will delve into in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin with, people has changed their idea about the appearance of people. These days, they do not like to pretend to present themselves as a person they are not. Hence, they are going to make relationships with others based on honesty and reliability. They know that an expensive car or a new brand of cloth does not depict the people’s abilities. Proving this, we are observing a lot of successful managers or businessmen or even scientists, having a simple and cheap car without showing off their life through an extraordinary cloth. As a result, everyone chooses a simple and trustworthy life owing to gathering healthier and more knowledgeable people in terms of state of the mind.
Second, human beings have changed their attitude about car and cloth. Since, manufacturing them would harm the environment. Our environment is more vulnerable and under danger than any other time. Therefor, everyone tries to protect it as much as possible. Hence, they purchase cars emitting less carbon dioxide into air or wearing cloth made by recyclable fabric. To me, it was a fascinating experience traveling to Turkey, noticing how they are inventing new ways to produce cloth with less impact on the environment as well as electric cars. This demonstrates that it is universal concern about the future of our planet and how countries and people deal with to resolve unpredicted problems.
To sum up, people not only wear or buy expensive cars to be judged as successful people, because they pursue making true relationship, but environmental concerns avoid doing so.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ged their attitude about car and cloth. Since, manufacturing them would harm the envi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, second, so, well, as a result, as well as, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03488372093 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82943081648 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59011627907 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2662556022 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1578947368 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1052631579 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315503995609 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902480363497 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564843883373 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193033151773 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267400496283 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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