Your school wants to improve the quality of students'
life in the dormitory. Which one of the following do you
think the school should build in dorms?
• A quiet study area (A quiet place for study)
• Exercise room for students to maintain
physical health
• Room for entertainment (like watching
movies)
Dormitories are one of the most significant buildings for students at schools, however, to some extent what activities the schools should add up to the dormitories, is highly debated. Although some people hold this view that eighter a quiet study area or a room for entertainment would be beneficial for students, others, including me, believe that building an exercise room next to dormitories has a pivotal role in enhancing students’ social and physical abilities. I will delve into this in the two upcoming paragraphs.
To begin with, no doubt that exercise provides healthier physical and mental health for students. With exercise, students can improve their physical ability and eventually have a better mind to come across problems in their classes, whether in lessons or behaving with their classmates. To illustrate this, psychology could help us. In an experiment, conducted by a famous psychology institute in Iran, two groups of students were asked to participate. The first group asked not to exercise, while, the other group was required to exercise every day. The results were fascinating. The group for whom exercise was a requirement had better scores in their exams, and also, behave more politely with their friends and teachers. Had they not exercised, they could not have achieved such glorious improvement in their classes.
Secondly, schools always pursue ways to boost social abilities among students. One of the effective ways to fulfill this is to have places where students can exercise. They can find new friends, through participating in sports activities, thus, they can enhance their social behaviors. They augment their experiment about other people, now they are involved with more people which gives them the opportunity to socialize. It is a best place to realize the best treats and find friends who have a lot in common.
To sum up, providing an exercise complex next to dormitories not only improves physical abilities among students, but also it is critically important for their future life owning to increases social interaction which is a significant characteristic for their future life and jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 581, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...very day. The results were fascinating. The group for whom exercise was a requireme...
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Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...hem the opportunity to socialize. It is a best place to realize the best treats a...
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Line 3, column 511, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... find friends who have a lot in common. To sum up, providing an exercise complex...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, no doubt, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29618768328 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82201045389 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58357771261 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.9160525212 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.235294118 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0588235294 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272653402878 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723828061093 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878352439421 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173439595261 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111656189024 0.0645574589148 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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