Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that nowadays, governments' policies play a pivotal role in determining on what area and how
much most activities get funds. In fact, governments are in charge of allocating resources, including financial
resources, among most national activities, two of which are supporting arts and supporting athletics such as statesponsored
Olympic teams. Between these two, some people are inclined to the idea that governments should
spend more money in support of the arts by taking measures such as setting up museums and art galleries.
However, I am personally of the opinion that supporting athletics, especially national teams, should be of a higher
priority for the governments to invest in. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous
reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The most significant reason why I believe governments should spend more money on supporting athletics is the
fact that these athletes are invaluable role models for the younger generations. National athletic competitions are
usually shown on TV, and most of the people including children tend to watch these games. Meanwhile, children
are always under the influence of adults who are doing something significant in a way. In particular, if a child
observes an athlete who wins a game and gets a medal in an international competition, she will probably imagine
herself as she is playing on that field or arena, and gets that medal. what's interesting is that it is likely that she
imagines herself doing all the exercises and putting in the required intense efforts to achieve such a position,
which is what I believe promotes a healthy lifestyle, both in terms of health and the effects of sports on body and
mind, and in teaching a person to persevere and work diligently in order to achieve her goals. The child learns from
her early ages that the more persistently someone works to reach her goals, the more the possibility of her
winning will become.
Another noteworthy reason to bear in mind is that national competitions, in which athletes from numerous
countries participate, are one of the most influential areas on a person's pride upon her country. As a matter of fact, when a person sees her country winning medals and their national anthem played in stadiums, where
international events are taking place and countless people from all over the world are watching it, they can't help but feel proud about their country. This pride not only evokes desirable feelings in people, but also it binds the people of a country together, and makes them feel closer to each other. For instance, when I was a child, our national soccer team won a very proficient team in the World Cup. I remember all the people were so happy that they were gathering in streets and juststreets, just congratulating each other, and celebrating the victory which we all were all commonly sharing pride upon. I remember both the happiness and the close relationship between people of my country, as if their previous conflicts had all gone to waste.
Finally, contemplating all the aforementioned remarks, we safely reach the conclusion that governments should
spend more money on supporting athletics rather than arts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, so, while, for instance, in fact, in particular, no doubt, such as, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2772.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 531.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22033898305 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86578266246 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532956685499 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 828.9 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.0897566978 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.0 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 24.0 4.53405017921 529% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236006660614 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785987361074 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0984000900376 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807119687111 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105527704494 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 11.7677419355 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.