Your school wants to improve the quality of students'
life in the dormitory. Which one of the following do you
think the school should build in dorms?
A quiet study area (A quiet place for study)
Exercise room for students to maintain
physical health
Room for entertainment (like watching
movies)
It is generally believed that standards of living in the dormitory have direct implications on student's lifestyles in every aspect. In addition, accomodating activity in daily routine seeds the plant of vigorousness and enthusiasm. As for the writer’s perspective, I firmly believe that schools should equip dorms with exercise rooms to enrich the quality of student's lives. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two compelling reasons.
First and foremost, being occupied with given chores in the dorm and only concentrating on school's duties gives rise to a monotonous life. On the other hand, forming new habits such as exercising helps young children make their lives more vigorous and energetic. Furthermore, this mindset will intrigue the students to pay attention to the other facets of their lives. In this regard, they can arrange an effective plan covering both their tasks and excitement. As a result, students will be able to compensate for the exhaustiveness of studying by devoting some time to sport skills. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. Back three years ago, I had such a busy routine with my exams. However, I needed leisure time, and after trying different activities such as playing video games and chatting with m friends, I finally decided to start working out, and that was my breakthrough that positively affected not only my lifestyle but also my mindset. Hence, this idea will enhance the quality of their living.
Secondly, exercising will help people maintain their physical health. Many studies have revealed that regularly working out precludes diseases or halt their escalating process. Moreover, it is the mean for a well-shaped body. For example, if a teenager starts exercising, she will embark on a new journey in her life which is not only healthy but it can also lead her to greater achievements. On the other hand, if a middle-aged male with a heart problem starts walking every day under the surveillance of his doctor, it might help his heart become more potent. Therefore, exercising can help to retain and boost physical health which, comprises a better life quality.
To sum up, all reasons mentioned above lead us to conclude schools should build exercise rooms and furnish them with sports apparatus to improve student's lives.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, as for, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2002.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17312661499 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79496754408 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612403100775 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5555201843 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.1 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.35 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.95 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236188137262 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671272004315 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770193126216 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156747972286 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473308438427 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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