Your school wants to improve the quality of students'
life in the dormitory. Which one of the following do you
think the school should build in dorms?
A quiet study area (A quiet place for study)
Exercise room for students to maintain physical health
Room for entertainment (like watching movies)
No one can cast doubt on the fact that academic studies play a vital role in students' future life, and during their education at schools and universities they should be provided with some facilities to have a more qualified life. In this regard, universities have three options in order to improve the quality of students' life at dormitory: building a quiet room for study, building an exercise room, or building a room for entertainment. For me, the latter option carries more weight. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which, are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that studying at university is very demanding and students are under tension and pressure of their education's heavy workload. In order to stay productive, they need some form of escapism to relieve their stress and unwind. It goes without saying that providing students with a place where they can have some amazing time, like watching movie, can be beneficial for them and helps them refresh their minds to meet new challenges. For example, a couple of years ago, during my bachelor's degree, I lived in dormitory. Me and all of my roommate had been required to assign so much homework and prepare ourselves for exams, at each weekend we had an appointment to go to TV room and watch a movie. This helped us to keep our energy at high level to overcome different hurdles.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that should be taken into account is that, providing students with a place for entertainment is more beneficial for whom live in dormitories, because in this place they have the chance to meet a lot of people, initiate contact with them and eventually, they may forge a new friendship. As a result, it can be a good opportunity for students to improve their social skills, as well as, enlarge their circle of friendship. Take my personal experience as a compelling example; I was a shy person and initiating contact with others was so difficult for me, but thanks to my school's managers who built a game room for us in our dorm, I tried to use that room in my spare time and play with different people, at end it helped me to shed my shyness and become a social person.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that, constructing a room for students where they can have entertainment and do amazing activities is the best course of action. The fact that, they can decrease their stress level by attending to these rooms, coupled with helping them to socialize and improve their social skills, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, then, well, for example, in short, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2187.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77510917031 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69647119118 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528384279476 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.7123646781 48.9658058833 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.8 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5333333333 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290315237743 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972637639132 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086875783518 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193669257148 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0953160324064 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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