5. Some people think that we should not limit the time
students (6-12-year-old) spend on technology products.
Others think that because technology products are harmful,
they should be limited to less than one hour. Which do you
prefer, why?
No one can cast doubt on the fact that technology is on an exponential speed, and its progression has led to introduction of a large number of cutting-edge technology products. Some people are of the opinion that students by the age between 6 to 12 years old should be permitted to spend their time on these devices without any restrictions, others believe that they have to be controled to spend a limited time with them. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that contoling the time students spend on technological devices and limiting them is more beneficial. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that, technological products are developed by some ingenious people and they contain a lot of amazing features that may turn students' habits into addiction when they are using them. Needless to say, one will have a lot of difficulties to prevent himself or herself from spending time with that advanced, amazing devices because of the enjoyness they provided for him. In consequence, students may end up spending a significant part of their time on those devices and also wasting their time which can be spent on doing other essential activities such as reading books, writing papers and so forth, all of which will be more helpful for them in their age in oder to improve themselves.
Another noteworthy reason that should be taken into account is that spending time with technological products may bring about some physical health problems for students, since these are sedentary activities. In order to prevent students from obesity that may cause problems in their growth, parents should control their children and give them the permision of using technological devices just for a limited time. According to statistics, the number of untimely death is on a rise, and the most important factor of this disaster is the lack of excercise among young people, especially young student, which end up them with untimely death. Had they be allowded to spend a limited time with technological devices, such as video games, they can spend some part of their time doing excercise and keeping themseleve in shape and out of anyother physical problems.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that, it is a more prudent course of action to let students using technological products for a limited time. The fact that it help them to use their time more productively instead of wasting that, coupled with helping them to maitain their physical heath, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... progression has led to introduction of a large number of cutting-edge technology products. Some ...
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Line 3, column 647, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...d up them with untimely death. Had they be allowded to spend a limited time with t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, then, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2215.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94419642857 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74059060319 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484375 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.0361999134 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.384615385 100.406767564 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.4615384615 20.6045352989 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76923076923 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33829532362 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134092507976 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725627931152 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227383120402 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675548325129 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 11.7677419355 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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