Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, due to the development of science and technology, people have access to Internet all around the world by which they are provided with a lot of information. The controversial question which arises here is whether, having access to this an inrodinate amount of information is beneficial for people or brings about problems for them. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that being provided with a lot of information benefits people in the modern era. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that, due to the complexities of modern era, most people have hectic daily schedules an they are suffering from timing issues. In order to get all their tasks done they have to manage their time. Needless to say, solving any problem is required to have access to the information about that issue, which is provided for people by Internet. As a result, the ocean of information is just a click away and people can use them for their tasks, so they can overcome the hurdles of accessing to some sources to get information through libraries and resources. For example, having access to a lot of information through the Internet make me more independent, because I was related to my mom and dad to drive me to the library in order to have access some sources for my projects. It goes without saying that this information give the golden chance to people to save their time.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that should be taken into account is that having access to a lot of information makes the situation good for people by which they can consider all aspects of a decision they are going to make. Different people share their experiences on the Internet, so ones can consider all eventually which are likely to happen for them. By using people experiences and their pattern of behavior in a similar situation, they are less likely to not solve their problems, in consequece, people will be more successfull aans also have a better life. Take my personal experience as a compelling example; a couple of years ago, when I was seeking to finalize my decision in choosing my field of study at university, I started reading older students experience and their advices on academic websites. This information helped me to choose my major with a more accutrate picture of future, this was an immense asset for me and I always use their experience to act better in some situation which similar to that happened for them.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that, providing with a lot of information through Internet not only does not cause problems, but also benefits people. The fact that people can have access to sources for their activities faster, coupled with the option of applying many of the provided experiences in their real life, is the reason which stregthens my claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 158, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...most people have hectic daily schedules an they are suffering from timing issues. ...
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Line 2, column 158, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'they'?
Suggestion: an; they
...most people have hectic daily schedules an they are suffering from timing issues. In or...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, for example, in short, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2453.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81925343811 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69873419745 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459724950884 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.3727810203 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.294117647 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9411764706 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64705882353 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29861795249 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125129704917 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701141363773 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228160227803 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474126068849 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.27 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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