Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, due to the advancement of technology a large number of changes have affected humans life and the children are not the exception of this fact. Some people are of the opinion that, nowaday, technology caused less creativity in children, others believe that todays' children are more creative than they were in the past. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that todays children have the lower level of creativity than they had in the past. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that, nowadays due to the exponential speed of technology, a large number of technological devices are provided for children which make them independent to others in order to spend their time and play. In this technology, thanks to artificial inteligence, students can play solely without any interaction wilt other children and real people. Needless to say, one practical approach to become a creative person and also be able to live better in the social, is being in contact with others from the early ages. As a reult, due the lack of access to this kind of technology in th past, children were more creative and they were able to learn a lot of thing from their friends who spent their time with.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that should be taken into account is that, todays' children spend a significant part of their time playing with video games and other technological devices. Not only this sedentary activity makes them vulnerable to obisity, but also they will lose the golden chance to experience situation and gain first-hand experiences. This first hand experiences and dealing with different situation in real world provides children with the opportunity to develop their skill and think outside of the box in the future decision. The less they spend their time with real world, the less creativite mind they will have For example, fiftheen years ago, when I was a five-years old child, I played with my friends in our yard, in one day, because we do not have any toys to play with we decided to use some useless materials and made a toy for us to play. This experience, although was not very valuable, made my mind to think out of box to solve problems with the presented opportunity. This was an immense asset for me which made me a creative person and benefits my whole life.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. The fact that they can play and spend their time without of any dependency to others, coupled with losing the chance of experiencing real things and broaden their horizen, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...s, due to the advancement of technology a large number of changes have affected humans life and t...
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Line 2, column 133, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...to the exponential speed of technology, a large number of technological devices are provided for ...
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Line 2, column 713, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of things'.
Suggestion: a lot of things
...re creative and they were able to learn a lot of thing from their friends who spent their time...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, for example, in short, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2322.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80745341615 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59586710643 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488612836439 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.206281069 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.125 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1875 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6875 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277262316882 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105322109288 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928873921466 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201887892209 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478635326647 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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