The government wants to invest money to develop
open space. Do you think it is better to build a park to
provide entertainment for everyone, or to build a sports
ground for a high school without a sports field?
Budget allocation peiorities have always been a key factor of a successful goverment, and, the government is resposible about providing a better environment for society's members by disbursing money on more practical projects. In order developing an open space, the government have two option divided into building a park which can be used by everyone, or building sports ground for a school which do have one. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that building a park is the better course of action. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that, nowadays, in order to survive the current economic climate most people are supposed to work a significant part of tjeir time in each days, so most of them are suffering from a certain degree of tension and stress due to the problems related to modern life such as financial issue, timing problems, to name but a few. In this regard, in order to stay productive in their life, people can spend their spare time in parks with their friends and beloved family members, so they can relieve their stress and refresh their mind to meet new challenges. Since, people are not required to pay any fee for going to park buiult by the government support, this place can be considered as a cost-effecctive option for people where they can have entertainments. Although building sports fields is beneficial for students and help them to unwind, park is consider a wider range of people which students are in this category too.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that should be taken into account is that, in the modern life, due to the progressive growth of population, most cities are in danger of air pollution, and human activity such as using privaate cars instead of using public trasportation systems is one of the most important factor of this problem. Trees are considered as a good natural system in reducing the pollution presented in air, they can help the purification of air. As trees are largely planted in parks, spending money of building a park, not only can be beneficail for people and provides them with cleaner air to breathe, but also can be a assisstant in government projects for managing the pollution and help them reduce the cost. In order to find out the effect of trees in the condition of air in one place, take the example of a rural and urban place. The rural place cosists more plants which results in the cleaner air than urban places with fewer trees and plants.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that, disbursing money of building a park is a more prudent course of action. The fact that provides people with a cost-effective entertainment to relieve their stress, coupled with acting as a supplementary method in reducing air pollution, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2437.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83531746032 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72210580412 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494047619048 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.3896876118 48.9658058833 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.466666667 100.406767564 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6 20.6045352989 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214680756569 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785074062437 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0941088887561 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143380599965 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0971011215763 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 11.7677419355 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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