Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can cast doubt on the fact that people's success is closely related to skills and abilities they develop during their life. Some people have the view that the more skills one have , the more likely to reach success. However, some other may hold an opposite viewpoint and believe that in order to be more successful, people should focus on one skill. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that the one with wider range of skills is more successful. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that, nowadays, we are in a situation where unemployment has reached epic propotions and entering a work place is a highly competitive procedure, through which the one with wider range of skills is more likely to win. Moreover, employers are intended to hire the one who have experience in many subjects and can be assigned with different dutieds, instead of hiring different employees for each tasks; because, it is more cost-effective for them. Needles to say, the one with different abilities is more likely to land a job in this competitive world we live. For example, a couple of years ago, me and one of my friends were seeking job. I have attended to different workshops and have gained some practical skills through them after my graduation, on the other hand, my friend has not participated in any learning classes more than our courses at university. When we both went for an interview, the employer choosed me due to many skills I have developed. Had I not gained that skills by taking part in different workshops, I would have not been the one who get hired.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that should be taken into account is that, the main purpose of all people during their life is to be a useful person. One way which make them to feel this sense is when they can help others to overcome their hurdles and difficulties they are dealing with. It goes without saying that, the one who have develops more skills are provided with the golden opportunity to offer his or her helping hand to his friends and beloved belonging, whenever they encounter problems. In consequence, not only will other people be able to address their problem successfully, but also that skillful person feel a sense of self-satisfaction which is an immense asset for him.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that, the one with many different skills is more likey to be successful. The fact that they will be provided with wide variety of jop possition in their future, coupled with helping them to achieve their main obl=jective as a human, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e the view that the more skills one have , the more likely to reach success. Howev...
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Line 4, column 87, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...us to the conclusion that, the one with many different skills is more likey to be successful. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, for example, in short, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.751565762 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64921044317 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507306889353 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.6926955471 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.444444444 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6111111111 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312786901044 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110336846399 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566988180107 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201726357406 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509653522262 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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