Do you agree or disagree with the following statement At universities and colleges sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowdays, no one can cast doubt on the fact that, education is one of the most important building blocks of the society and should be provided in the best condition of all aspects for all students. The controversial question which arises here is whether, social activites and sport shoud be funded as classes and libraries are. When it comes to me, it is my firm cconviction that sport and other social activities play a pivotal role in students growth and they shoul be considred as well as classes. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason whcih comes to my mind is that universities are small cases of the society in where students learn how to behave properly in the real society and improve their skill. In this regard, Social activities are the best kind of example which privde students with the golden chance to participate in different group and socialize with different people. In this kind of activities they discuss with others about different subjects, not only do they learn how to speak and convey their idea, but also they can try to tolerate opposite viewpoint. For example, a couple of years ago, in my first year of studying at universities, I became a member of our department's scientific community, in which we discussed about new scientific article and other that days problem which were happening all around the world. This helped me to improve my social skill and sheded fear introducing my idea in a particular subject, which was an immense asset for me and benefits my todays life.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that should be taken into account is that, in sports and social activities students are supposed too work in teams. Having the ability of team-working is an important character that everyone should have in order to be successful in her or his whole life. Attending sports and social activities give the gollden chance to student si that they can improve and be a teamworker, by which they will act more efficient in their class actiivities. Take my personal experience as a compelling example; I was a painfully unresposible person and I always did not do my job completely in all homework and assignments. By attending baskeball clubs and being a member of the university's team, I had found that, in order to success I have to take the resposibility and do my best as a member of a team. Had the university not allocated the sports as much money as classes, I would not have be able to experience that situation and become a resposible person.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the universities should disburse money on classes and social activities equally. The fact that social activities provide student with the chance to be a sociable person in their life, coupled with helping them to lean teamworking, is the reason which strengthens my claim.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 790, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
...t new scientific article and other that days problem which were happening all around...
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Line 3, column 915, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...much money as classes, I would not have be able to experience that situation and b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, well, for example, in short, kind of, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2449.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85912698413 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77861594497 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503968253968 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 34.170749749 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.058823529 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6470588235 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18714027435 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679779532356 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405459420633 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127786624176 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029538725699 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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