The government wants to invest money to develop open space. Do you think it is better to build a park to provide entertainment for everyone, or to build a sports ground for a high school without a sports field?
Recently the phenomenon of investing money to establish open space has sparked a heated debate. In this connection, although some people believe that the investment should allocate to enrich high school by building a sports field, I concur with the notion that governments should develop a park. I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
Firstly, parks play an essential role in reducing air pollution, and governments should consider them as priorities. To be more specific, increasing factories and industrial developments decrease air quality, so governments should make efforts to deal with pollutants by building vegetation in cities. According to my own experience, two years ago, when the rate of respiratory disease increased in my country, doctors claimed that this problem is related to poor air quality. Therefore, the government has decided to eliminate pollution and maintain the environment by building more vegetation surrounding the city. When the government has convinced to develop parks in the city, not only the quality of air enhances, but also fewer patients suffer from respiratory illness and cancer.
Secondly, when the government invests more money to build parks in cities, they help people to escape from daily stress. To elucidate, if a town has vegetation, people will enjoy their lives by watching beautiful landscapes, which is a beneficial method for relaxation. For example, my mother was depressed several months ago, after consulting with an adviser, he told us dedicating a tremendous amount of time at home hurt her mind. He stated that going to the parks would treat her mental problem because open space has a significant impact on suppressing mental tension. As my mother was at home, she always thought about her difficulties; however, by having a pleasant time in parks, she has forgotten about her crisis in life. Hence, she has become a satisfactory person and discard all harmful thoughts.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that the government should involve building parks. Not only do parks diminish air pollution, but it also encourages people to spend their time in open space, which affects their mental health significantly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as for, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35694050992 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8598936845 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606232294618 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7797768657 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.1875 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0625 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236938592902 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712508648605 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648049183924 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147488562592 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063858967818 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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