Governments are responsible for providing suitable places to satisfy poeple's desires in different aspects. Usually, government invest money to launch open spaces. In my opinion, governments should provide sports ground for all schools at first. If a school lack a sport field, building a suitable sports ground for the school should be the governments' number one priority. In what follows, I will elaborate on the reasons of my idea.
First and foremost, sports feilds are the most favorable places for most students. These fields have different functions in a school; they not only are motivation for students but also help them have healthy lives. Playing games with friends in schools incentivizes the students to a great extent. It causes that students like the schools since they experience happy moment there. My childhood is compelling example for this. When I was ten, I went to a new school in our new neighbourhood. Our school did not have a good sports field and I loved to play football with my classmates. Therefore, I could not play football with them at all; I was not only disappointed about not having sports field, but also did not do my assignments because I hated that school. The next year, my father changed my school, and we enrolled in a school with a awsome sport field. Not only was I happy with playing football, but also I did my best in my assignments.
Moreover, students need to do exersice. According to scientific articles, if students do not have regular exersice, they will suffer from variety of diseases in the future. The researchers propose that it is best to provide enough equipment for students in school to be sure that they have enough movements and sports. In other words, when a person get sick, the goverment should spend money to cure him. Thus, having a healthier society leads to spending less money for curing people. By providing students enough space to do exersice we will be sure that students have a normal and healthy lifestyle. This will be beneficiary for both governments and people living in society.
In conclusion, I believe that having sports fields is of great importance for a school, and a governments should consider it if they want a society with healthy people. Moreover, it would be economical that a government prevent the excessive money-spending in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: a government; governments
...s of great importance for a school, and a governments should consider it if they want a socie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93401015228 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75542888922 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484771573604 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2900678504 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4166666667 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31128761142 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967785269685 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830032950193 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217913705355 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100337770069 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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