Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Having a Job is an important challenge in evreyone's life. If we do not have a job, we can not earn any money to coordinate our lives. Sombody thinks a secure job is better than satisfying job. others disagree. In my opinion, altough having a job which is enough satisfying is wonderful, a secure job is more vital than anything. There are two important reasons for this regard.
First, there are only limited job opportunities for us in our life. If we decline a job offer, which we are a candidate of that job, there is not a gaurantee to have a better job offer later. I remember, 2 years ago, when I was seeking for a job, a famous compony gave me a secure job offer with constant sallary and insurance. Concurently, I recieved a breathtaking job offer from google compony which was a dream for me in all of my life; but the google job offer was for 8 months later. I had to make an important decision which was able to change my life. Finally, I decied to declined the secure job offer and wait for google's job. I had my worst moments in all of my life during that 8 months, becuase I did not have enough money to manipulate my life. After that 8 months, google sent an email to me and gave an appologize to me and said that they were not able to hire me in their compony. As you can see, waiting for a job, even it is the best job in all the world, is not a terrible idea.
Second, life needs money in all time not only in specific times. When you decide to wait for a job, you probably incounter to a gap period which you don not have enough money in that time. Therefore, it can be terrible. I remember when I was waiting for a job from google, I needed 2000$ for my mother's heart operation. I did noy have any money in that time because I did not have any job. Unfortunately my mother died, and I was not a good son for him. Now, I am so reach but my mother never come back to me. As you can see, waiting for a jon can make a disaster for evreybody.
To sum up, secure job is more important than any other job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Others
...cure job is better than satisfying job. others disagree. In my opinion, altough having...
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Line 2, column 787, Rule ID: SENT_AN_EMAIL[1]
Message: Consider using 'emailed'.
Suggestion: emailed
...te my life. After that 8 months, google sent an email to me and gave an appologize to me and ...
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Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$2000'.
Suggestion: $2000
...waiting for a job from google, I needed 2000$ for my mothers heart operation. I did n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, as for, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.09823677582 4.8611393121 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38835300749 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435768261965 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0312364484 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.7391304348 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2608695652 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47826086957 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288723585867 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102408266824 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715376911873 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212720834124 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274936603716 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.5 11.7677419355 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.2 10.9000537634 57% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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