Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would he more satisfying.
While some people may hold a view that the people should opt a secure job; however, others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that a career which satisfies the people is the best option to choose. I personally agree with the second belief. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
The first exquisite reason which gives the adherence to my outlook is that an individual with his or her willing job is happier. Indeed, it is lucidly obvious that the person, who satisfies by her or his job, does complain less than the others; inasmuch as the difficulties of that career is less tangible. As a result, he or she will spend more hours on the task with the less exhaustion. A vivid example can be given to shed a light on the issue is my own example. Five years ago, I was working for a design office which has completely differed from my desired job. Thus, I went to the job reluctantly, and each one hour seemed as one day. However, last year, I have started to work as an instructor in a university, which is my dream job. Although I have a tough schedule, I am happy and I feel more positive.
The second fact embraced my idea is that the people with their satisfied works are more productive. In fact, as they overlook the barriers of the job, they present better function. Besides, in a case which they face a problem they are creative than the other employees. According to the noteworthy, intelligent survey conducted in my country, approximately sixty-nine percent of employees who are satisfied by their job present ten-fold better function in the jobs. In addition, based on another cogent statistic released in my country, nearly seventy percent of satisfied workers illustrate the logical and best option when they counter a knotty problem in their works. Consequently, for the sake of this statistic and survey, the satisfaction plays a fundamental role in the workers' productivities.
Nevertheless, some people may assert that the secure job is a stable source of income; so there is no concern about the job losses. However, they underestimate a crucial factor that the stability of a job and its income are related to the employee's function. In a situation which the employee do not show the desired reception, he or she will lose his or her job. On the other hand, people who satisfy by their careers guarantee their satiable income, since they illustrate the best performance.
To wrap it up, based on the all aforementioned reasons, one can logically draw the conclusion that the people should pick a job satisfied with it; inasmuch as they will be happier, and more productive. Moreover, they secure their job indirectly. All in all, I firmly recommend that people should elect a job which impels them.
To wrap it up, based on the all aforementioned reasons, one can logically draw the conclusion that the people should pick a job satisfied with it; inasmuch as they will be happier, and more productive. Moreover, they secure their job indirectly. All in all, I firmly recommend that people should elect a job which impels them.
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Suggestion:
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'i feel', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.193126022913 0.229887763892 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.139116202946 0.158761421928 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0867430441899 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0490998363339 0.046263068375 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.088379705401 0.0685040099705 129% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.103109656301 0.118717715034 87% => OK
Participles: 0.0229132569558 0.0351676179071 65% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.77556581759 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0163666121113 0.0309702414327 53% => OK
Particles: 0.00327332242226 0.00188951952338 173% => OK
Determiners: 0.127659574468 0.0887237588012 144% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0261865793781 0.0209618222197 125% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0212765957447 0.0139019557991 153% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3156.0 2387.08602151 132% => OK
No of words: 542.0 408.028673835 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.82287822878 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.48200974243 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.333948339483 0.338922669872 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.249077490775 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.177121771218 0.174417080927 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.123616236162 0.112833075102 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77556581759 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457564575646 0.524397521467 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 53.7750098343 59.2087087015 91% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6684587814 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0740740741 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6315667895 48.84282405 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.888888889 120.699889404 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0740740741 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.644075263715 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 44.9818231516 45.7405998639 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.15384615385 1.45489161554 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404212923589 0.300154397459 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101999508674 0.103427244359 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0731150725794 0.0752933317313 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.511168159792 0.497263757937 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.159742465926 0.151897553556 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151853340276 0.114077575197 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628849614123 0.0781384742642 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.501689213384 0.336927656856 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.253463447747 0.067059652881 378% => No any connections among paragraphs
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283037186862 0.210909579961 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037580920652 0.0618886996521 61% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8870967742 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 17.0 8.42114695341 202% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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