Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would he more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Chossing a job in a very important part of our lives. We will live most of our life and spend most of our time doing this job, hence, it really needs to satisfy our goals.
Though some differences can observed between the ways people reat to this issue. Some prefer to choose a more satisfying job that they are enthusiastic about while the others would disagree and takes the available secure job. In my view, it is a better way to take away the available secure job forr two important reasons.
The main result is that, by choosing the secure job one does not have to wait until another fitting job to come across. Everyone needs money to manipulate his life so he really needs a job and an income source to address this problem which, in most cases, cannot be handled otherwise. For example, few years ago I had an opprtunity in a governmental office which I defered. This job was concerned about some official matters where you had to sit behind a desk for the whole day and repeating the same jobs everyday. I really hated this kind of routine jobs so I rejected the offer. But later on, when I needed money I encountered with lots of problem to handle my life and had to get loans to overcome this problem. As you can see, I faced with lots of problem because of my decision.
The other reason is that, you can find a better and more satisfying job while you are in the current secure job. Chossing one job would not prevent you from choosing and searching for other jobs. One can apply for the available job while searching for a more fitting job. This way he may benefit the advantagous of the both sides. he can earn money doing the current job and manage his life and meanwhile look for his desired job. For instance, as I mentioned earlier, I could have applied for the job when I got the offer and while I was working and managing my life more easily, I could look for a job which was more satisfying for me. In this case one year later I got hired in a research and innovation center of SAIPA, most well-known car producer in my country, one year after the first job offer. This job was really interesting for me and I enjoyed my time doing this job while earning money. However I did not choose the good choice and as a result I suffered that year from the lack of money. This experience taught me that, it is possible to look for an interesting job while working elsewhere.
In sum, though some may disagree, I think doing some routine job while searching for more convenient job is the best choice. Not only will you struggle with monetary issues, but also you can find your desired dream job later in the feature. Hence, one should benefit the opportunities that comes across his way and choose the available job and look for a better one at the same time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...it really needs to satisfy our goals. Though some differences can observed between t...
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Line 5, column 332, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ample, few years ago I had an opprtunity in a governmental office which I defered...
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Line 5, column 508, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...e whole day and repeating the same jobs everyday. I really hated this kind of routine jo...
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Line 5, column 637, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of problems'.
Suggestion: lots of problems
... when I needed money I encountered with lots of problem to handle my life and had to get loans ...
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Line 5, column 747, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of problems'.
Suggestion: lots of problems
...s problem. As you can see, I faced with lots of problem because of my decision. The other rea...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...efit the advantagous of the both sides. he can earn money doing the current job an...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ime doing this job while earning money. However I did not choose the good choice and as...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, really, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, as a result, in most cases, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2267.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40194174757 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31967734974 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438834951456 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2939995041 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.68 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30242357619 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101335098066 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638668173916 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180330478657 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608958618408 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.