Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In the modern era, occupations are regarded as crucial factors contributing to the prosperity of people's lives in various aspects. One of the heated debates in this realm is associated with the caliber of a job. Many people adhere to the view that we have to spend a long time seeking for a proper vocation, while others prefer to seize the first opportunity than comes to their doorstep. Ego, when it comes to my stance, by weighing up the pros and cons, I firmly hold that we have to go for a secure job. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.

The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that working somewhere that assures us we are not going to get fired in the future because of the unfavorable economic situations. Nowadays, many companies are getting rid of their staff due to their financial problems. Knowing that we have a stable position in our firm increases our potential for coming up with a schedule to achieve our life goals based on our current situation. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Two years ago, I was accepted for a software developer in a company. I made a three years contract with them which could be extended for the other two years. Since I knew that I could count on my salary, I bought a car with the assistance of a loan from a bank. Each month, I put a specific portion of my income aside to pay the bills with that. Thus, not having a secure profession, I could not have afforded a vehicle.

Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that starting a job right away makes us able to become acquainted with the environment and rules so that we can progress quickly. It takes considerable time and effort to understand the necessary procedures of a firm, so the sooner we begin working, the bigger our chances get for getting a promotion. For instance, my father began to work as a bank clerk when he was twenty. Gradually, he learned the approaches to excel in his position, and after fifteen years, he became the bank manager while he was incredibly young for that position. Thus, not only did he earn piles of money, but he also achieved a promising social status at that age.

In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, it is better to seize our opportunities of getting a secure occupation. This is because we have the ability to decide for our future based on our status quo, and we can reach convenient positions when we are still young.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, thus, while, for instance, in brief

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60898876404 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69175026797 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557303370787 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4582593335 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1904761905 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193367647202 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055384765267 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366069684776 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113789323892 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318967813232 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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