Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern hectic life it is important for anyone to have a job. A question might arise, with respect to this fact, whether people should accept any job offer? As it is a moot point, there might not be a general agreement on this topic. Personally, however, I rest on the belief that it worth that people wait for the job that is more satisfying for them rather than a secure job even though they get a secure job easier. In the following, two reasons are put forth to clarify my personal perspective.
The first reason that illustrates my opinion is that as it affects their heath, it is necessary that people being happy with their job. Broadly speaking, people, nowadays, spend an important part of their time in their work, so if they do not their like it and are not comfortable with it, their level of depression will might be increased. In contrast, if they like their job and enjoy the hours spent at the work, they would be happier and stand in better level of psychology health. Moreover, they can better deal with their jobs problems, which lead them to be more satisfied and enjoy more of their life. To give a good example, I can speak about my brother that since he found his desirable job, his behavior became better. He always like programming, since he could not find a job related to programming, he was teaching english in an english institution as a teacher, but he was not satisfied with it, he was always angry and upset. However, now, he works in a company as a programmer, he is happier and more satisfied of his life.
The second demonstration which can help me develop my view is that if people enjoy their job, their chance of success will be increased. To clarify more, when people enjoy their job, they strive more, and consequently their productivity and creativity increased. By developing creativity, in order, they can come up with new method in their job that will bring them a substantial chance of success. For instance, compare two men which the first one loves his job and the second one just does his job for its earning. It is obvious that the first man does his job with more diligence, and enthusiasm. He tries to develop his knowledge in his work research area; hence he will be more successful in his job and promoted, so his earning will be increased presumably; however, the second one, who does not enjoy his job, does not have a tremendous chance of promoting or increasing his salary. This example clearly demonstrates the more enjoying a job, the more money you can earn.
In the light of above-mentioned reasons, I am of the proponent that everybody should attend a job which they satisfy with because not only does it provide them with more psychological health, but also their chance of promoting in the job is higher.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, broadly speaking, for instance, in contrast, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2290.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62626262626 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57674055318 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460606060606 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8670323696 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276941262983 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107207678701 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692242355953 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199198313552 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674293797761 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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