Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Choosing a good job is a crucial factor for youths because it creates their future, so they should be cautious. A question might arise is that whether young people should take jobs which have many similarities to their parents' jobs, or take a job that is different. As it is a moot point there might not be a general agreement on this topic. Personally, however, I rest on the belief that finding a job that is similar to their parents' job could be beneficial for children. In the following, two convicting reasons are put forth to clarify my perspective.
The first illustration which can help to develop my opinion is that youths can use their parents' experience by choosing a job similar to their job. Broadly speaking, should they work in companies like their parents' companies, they will have access to endless information and experience at the beginning of their work. Gaining this information demands along years of working; however, they access to them at the beginning of their work because of their parents. As a result, they can show better performance at their carries in comparison with who do not have ability to use their parents' experience for that job. To give a good example, consider a young dentist who wants to start his carrier. If his father is dentist, he could provide him with a lot of useful information such as where is the best place for his office, or which is the best brand for his instruments.
Also, it cannot go unnoticed that adolescents can use their parents' reputation if they opt a carrier like theirs. Generally states, people gain reputation in their work after years, so the one who wants to start his job has no reputation among society, and no one know him. Therefore, it is better for new ones to start their work with who is well-known among the society. Consider the last example, for a young dentist it is better to start his work in his father's department, so he has more chance to flourish in his work since he has more patients and clients due to his father reputation. Moreover, he can use his father facilities and instruments, so he can save more money.
In the light of above mentioned reasons, I am a proponent of the idea that children should choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs because not only can they use their parents' experience to become successful at their carrier, but also they can use their parents' reputation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... jobs, or take a job that is different. As it is a moot point there might not be a...
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Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...nce at their carries in comparison with who do not have ability to use their parent...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...they can use their parents reputation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, broadly speaking, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72684085511 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61462473217 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453681710214 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.63309049 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.058823529 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7647058824 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314714006794 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124282051249 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115635630421 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24412463574 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923695782495 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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