Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern and progressive world, careers are one of the vital parts of individuals' life. Everybody wants to have a high-level and proper job. Although somebody believes that children should follow their parents' job, I strongly feel we should not oblige them to choose jobs which may not be their interest. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, each person is entitled to pursue his/her interest career, whether they elect their parents' job. Interest in what we do is the most crucial factor for hard-working and diligence. Moreover, if people please their daily work routines, they will have put more effort to elevate their position. As a result the improvement in the work accelerates, and they benefit from the greater implication in their life. My personal experience is a compelling example of this reason. Five years ago, when I wanted to select my major and following my future career, my parents recommended me to follow their work and to be a computer engineer. Nevertheless, I have even no little interest in engineering. I wanted to be a photographer, but, they insisted on choosing their major, and I accepted their advice. After two years of study, I had no great impression on my grades, and I just spend my time hopelessly. Besides studying for dental things, I pursued photographing a little. They saw my interest in this art, so they allow me to quit that current major and enrolled in photographing class. After a short time, I had been chosen the most creative photograph in the institute, and my parent was proud of me.
Secondly, if the parent's job has not made enough salary, children should certainly track another way. Nowadays, money is necessary for many affairs. Thus, if they cannot make good money, they will have a lot of problems in affording financial matters, and a hard life will wait for them. For instance, my friend was obliged by his parents to stay in his born city and help them in their work. They had a simple work with not sufficient money that led to many problems in providing essential affairs for their children. My friend decided to leave his little city, and select a job in a larger city to work in a place where he can make money for his family. After one year of hard work, he has become successful and now he has earned a high salary.
In conclusion, I believe if children are not interested in their parents' job, or they cannot afford financial problems with the salary has earned in their parents' work, they had not to follow their careers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72828507795 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60888020448 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521158129176 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5372716855 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4583333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7083333333 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258774796798 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077736765433 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794041483591 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204930422319 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579532633644 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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