TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.

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TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.

What fied of work children should choose in the future and how much parents should get involved has always been a great debateful. Although, parents are somehow childrens' first mentor and advisor in their lives, I believe, children should choose their own jobs and should not be forced to continue their parents' jobs. I have a few reasons for my opinion which I am going to discuss in the following.

The first reason concers childrens' power of decision making and how forceing them to take after their parents's job can affect it. Parents should raise their children to be confident and self-depended human beings and by making them to take such important decision based on their opinion, their are not quite helping them in this journy. Plus, one other important result of allowing children to deciede fo themselves is that children can put this lesson into use in other crises in their lives.

Secondly, they might be talented in other fields and not in their parents'. Sometimes children have some special talents different from their parents and by taking advange of it, they will be more successful and have more outcome while putting less effort.

Lastly, by means of creativity, children can have other personal prefernces and inclination to one specific field of work as they can have differet desires and charactristice than their parents. Consider a child with doctor parents, they migth have memories of their parents working hard to get where they are and on the contrary, they might see some other close realtive of theirs who is pretty successful and plus the job looks more interesting to the child, they may prefer that job over their parents'.

To sum up, I believe it is important for children to choose their own jobs with no presure.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ren should choose in the future and how much parents should get involved has always ...
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Line 3, column 289, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...ortant decision based on their opinion, their are not quite helping them in this jour...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, while, on the contrary, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90604026846 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41543614837 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546979865772 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.4181717116 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.909090909 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0909090909 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292521838115 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126170213789 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871062460873 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191621001832 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638556504215 0.0645574589148 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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