Technology develops so fast and brings people more multipurpose devices like communicating devices like cell phones, or enjoyable devices like online games. A question that might arise with respect to this fact is that whether this technology helpful for children education or not? As it is a moot point, there might not be a general agreement on this topic. Some people believe that children today spend lots of their time on these devices, and it is a disadvantage of technology. However, personally, I rest on the belief that this technology is really helpful and they can even benefit children's education if they are used in the right way. In the following, two convicting reasons are put forth to decline my personal perspective.
The first illustration which can demonstrate my opinion can be facilities that technology brings us. Broadly speaking, schools can utilize this technology as teaching tools. To be more precise, modern schools provide students with high technology teaching tools like smart boards to develop the learning process. To name a good example, applications which are designed to teach and summarize lessons for students. For instance, I know an application which helps students to proper better for the international entrance exam, which is one of the most important exams in my country. In essence, most of the students are depended on these programs and not until they use them did they learn.
The second demonstration which can help me develop my view is that I believe the time which students spend on cell phones, online games, and etc does not damage the learning process. Generally speaking, in few past decades, children spent most of their time on outdoor plays, as a controversy, nowadays children spend their play times with their devices like Xbox, or online games. Hence, the time that children spend on their education is proximately equal to the time they spent in the past.
In the above-mentioned reasons, unlike the vast majority of people I am against this idea that technology devices make the children's education difficult and I believe it even help the learning process because not only can these devices be used as teaching tools and facilitate the learning process, but also, in comparison with the past, it does not decrease the valuable time that children might study.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, really, second, so, broadly speaking, for instance, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1954.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11518324607 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72646712466 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494764397906 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.9653498314 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.125 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.875 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170067327402 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594742168105 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577290766528 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116751334923 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626529031918 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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