Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Learning is a major and important part in our growing up. Through this big journey from childhood to adulthood, a child faces many issues which he or she don't know anything about them, but it should be taught to children, because they need to deal with them inevitably. Some believe children should learn important topics like financial issue while they are raising, while some disagree. IN my point of view, as soon as children can understand the concept of monetary affairs, they should educate by different suitable methods.
First and foremost, money is one of the basic pillars of every work. Money management is a vital skill which can help people, not only adults but children also how to deal with their financial matters. For example, if we know the power of money and importance of how we can make money, we consider many factors when we want to prioritize to spend them. We spend a lot of time to plan for our money to make the best benefits of them. I remember my father taught us a good play game, named Monopoly, which it was about money management, in early ages. When at twenty, I made the first money from a part time job, it took a month to decide how I spent that. I invest 25 percent of that in a saving account which now in my forties it has grown up 15 times. Whenever I look at this saving account statement, I acknowledge my father's money instruction.
Secondly, life is changing and our monetary situation too. If we know a little about money management, it can help us to pass some difficult situations such as lay off, economy recess, health problem. car accident, or good event such as buying a house or graduation of the university and pay off it's loan. For instance, making more money by itself can't guarantee successfulness. Most important issue in monetary affairs is cash flow, which is mean your income should be bigger than your spending. The more this gap, you will be more relax. For instance, go back to my father's lesson, my brother started a new business in language education field only with 1000 dollars. After doing many attempts to build a simple website, his business grow up, Finally, he found more customers which they were eager to buy his services. He spent some part of his income to improve his website. With this strategy, now he has a big website which get services to more than 300 students online.
To wrap up, it is so useful to learn children money management. They can learn the importance of money and the utility of management too. It would be so useful if our schools have plan to teach money management in their lessons
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2131.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61255411255 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47602113216 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541125541126 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2545997234 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.24 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.48 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168699041177 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488203678857 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389950533837 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112434483431 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303363724392 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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