Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the past few years, the issue whether more young people nowadays depend on their parents to make decisions or not has kindled heated debate among people. Depending on different personal experience, we find that a number of people hold the idea that much more young people get rely on their parents now. However, given a chance, I tend to support the statement that fewer young people are depending on their parents.
First, as for me and my friends, we are trying to be away with our parents in daily life, because it will help us become more independent and get used to society quicker. Take my good friend john as an example, he is a boy who always refuses his mother whenever she would like to offer some help. Though he says it is hard to do all the things by himself, it does have some advantages when his parents have passed away one day. Because if he is always asking parents for help, he will lose the ability of surviving on his own. You can see, it’s not a wise idea that asking your parents do everything for you, because you can not do things like this every day all the time you need.
Second, we have much more methods of gaining knowledges which we could use to overcome some difficulties than before. Nowadays we have internet which is based on personal computer and we could use them to search information about everything we want to know. While in the past, young people could only ask others for help or went to the library and bookstores, which was not an efficient way of gaining knowledges. For instance, I cut my fingers last week by mistake, and I searched for the first-aid methods on my phone. At last, I covered my fingers with alcoholic and bandage, and the whole things had cost me less than 10 minutes. On the contrary, my father once told me that he had been bitten by a dog when he was a high school student, he could only ask his teacher for help because nobody knew the way of dealing such things at that age of his generation.
Granted, to some extent, parents are much more reliable than ourselves. However, nowadays young people have known that the more they are trying to solve problem by themselves, the more independent and more intelligent they will become. Therefore, there are more convincing reasons for me to believe that fewer and fewer young people are still depending on their parents to make decisions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...t the statement that fewer young people are depending on their parents. First, as for me...
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...lieve that fewer and fewer young people are still depending on their parents to make decisions. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, while, as for, for instance, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59154929577 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36065749922 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514084507042 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 34.5027956342 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.058823529 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0588235294 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270483246964 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09572432176 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928865183794 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186849217546 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118300761596 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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