Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, we see that the new generation differs every day in every aspect and behavior. Personally, I believe that today's young adults are much independent than what their pers were before. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
Firstly, I think that nowadays kids cannot expect their parents to devour all their time to them. That is young people learn from early ages to become independent because their parents are usually do not have enough time to spend with them, so they often should make decisions themselves. Young individuals are, most of the time, lonely. As a result, they usually cannot have a friendly relationship with their parents, so they have to decide what is better without considering what their parents think. For example, when I was in high school, my mother was always at work because she was a nurse. She even sometimes came home after two or three days, and when she arrived home, she was too exhausted to talk to me, so I could not depend on her that much. The absence of my mother leads me to become more independent because I had to do most of the things alone, such as preparing my meal, going to school, and also big decisions. However, today's busy lives have so many disadvantages for kids, but it helps them to become independent young adults.
Secondly, in today's society, there are more job opportunities for young adults such as part-time jobs which can help them to improve their abilities and become mature sooner. It is more common these days that young people go to work part-time jobs in the summer. Although these jobs do not have good salaries, being around adults in the workplace and seeing how they communicate with other people, and how they make decisions in tough situations, make young people act like an adult to improve their social abilities, and eventually get better job positions and salaries. For instance, when my brother was seventeen years old, he became a waiter in a famous restaurant in which famous people came to have their meals. He had to make better decisions each day to become a better employee and get a raise. In fact, by the end of the summer, he was not that naive young highschool boy once he was. His social behavior improved a lot, and even he could suggest better ideas to me when I wanted to do something meaningful. By and large, today's workforce opportunities can make young individuals mature at an early age, and they can decide better even in the hard days.
To put it in a nutshell, I think nowadays young people experience more difficulties such as being lonely most of the time because of their busy parents, and better job opportunities that they both result in becoming a better decision-maker themselves than what we expect from their peers before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...ndent because their parents are usually do not have enough time to spend with them...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, as to, even so, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in fact, such as, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2314.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75154004107 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52678728446 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488706365503 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.0509462461 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.7 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.35 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315640925052 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976368805136 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660618318238 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190056059631 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542779181776 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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