Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Some people think that young people in that past are more depended on their parents to make decisions than today young people, while others think vice versa. From my perspective, it is true that young people in the past depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them than today young people. In the following paragraphs, I will explain my reasons in detail.
To begin with, young people, nowadays, are more literate than young people in the past. This is a fact that people can make their own decisions when they know all aspects of their decision. Educational environment is one of the best situations that young people can analyze all aspects of their decisions. For example, I remember that my mother always tell me how my elder brother got help from my parents in every decisions of him; such as buying a cloth till choosing a university. He did that because he was not sure about the consequence of his own decision. However, I always depend on myself to making a decision because I learn to see all aspects of my decisions.
Moreover, you can't deny the fact that technological improvement such as internet and social medias can help today young people to make their decisions. You can make decision by surfing the web and ask questions about your choices in an online forum. Then somebody who has the proper knowledge in that field will help you. For instance, when I want to buy a cloth, tool, or everything, I simply search the web for pros and cons of that good. This is a way how the internet help me to choose the proper good.
Taking all the factors above into consideration, I briefly explain my reasons about why I think young people nowadays are more independent in making decisions than young people in the past. It is not only because of the literacy of young people, but also technological improvement help this fact.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, however, moreover, so, then, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1548.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73394495413 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52949383965 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483180428135 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 469.8 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.101837226 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.75 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4375 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477534922336 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162027081202 0.076458572812 212% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143585951038 0.0737576698707 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316486555434 0.150856017488 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115970765442 0.0645574589148 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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