Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
I agree that young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives today than young people in the past. My reason is that they make decisions based on their knowledge and advice from professionals rather than the advice from their parents. Besides, they are more financially independent so they don’t need to follow their parents’ wishes.
In the first place, nowadays young people acquire knowledge easier than young men did in the past, so they are better able to make decisions about their own lives. For example, the internet is well developed today, and young people use the internet to get a huge amount of information they need to make decisions. In contrast, twenty years ago, people relied more on their parents who have more experience to make decisions because they had fewer resources to gain knowledge. They only had accesses to limited information from newspaper and TV programs. Consequently young people today are more equipped to make informed decision for their own.
In addition, young people today tend to seek advice from people besides their parents. To be more specific, they consult their friends who work in various fields to get specific information they need. Moreover, there are many consultants with professional knowledge in modern society and young people have easy access to them. Take myself for example, when I have to make a decision about what insurance policy to buy, I ask for advice from friends who work as insurance agents.
Last but not least, young people today are more financially independent and as a result, they are capable of making decision about their own lives. In other words, if they can have financial support from other sources besides their parents, they can make decisions on their own. For example, if students want to attend college, they can pay by the scholarships or the money made from taking part-time jobs. However, in the past, the financial support from parents decides whether students could attend college. That is, financial independence enables young people make decisions based on their own will nowadays.
In conclusion, I believe that young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them in the past. Today, young generation are the main decision maker in making decisions about their own lives, because they are able to acquire the information they need through various sources. Furthermore, their decision won’t be affected by their parents because they don’t rely on their financial support.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 555, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
...rmation from newspaper and TV programs. Consequently young people today are more equipped to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in other words, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17761557178 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53783769606 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440389294404 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.5240928214 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.4 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.55 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.542295700092 0.236089414692 230% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.229792652911 0.076458572812 301% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.175402574198 0.0737576698707 238% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.385774768253 0.150856017488 256% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886997331086 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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