Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's progressive world we live in, no one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that parents play a leading role in their children's social life. Even though some sociologists claim that young people are still dependent on their parents for making decisions, as in the past, I would like to state they are now better in making decisions on their own. There two main reasons why I feel this way, which are going to be explained with examples in the following essay.
In the first place, with growing technology, young people are better able to learn various social behavior skills. In other words, if teenagers do not have access to computer and or internet, they will not learn as fast as others who are benefiting these technologies. Actually by doing this, they will kill two birds by one stone because they not only learn, but also would have some extra time, which can be devoted to learning some other social skills, due to the fact that they are saving time by using the technology. An experience in my own life could be a proper example to illustrate this point. When I was 14, my father bought me a computer. Loving the technology, I started learning my homework through the computer. In merely 6 months, I ranked first in our class. That was because of using technology and considering that I was the only person in the class that takes advantage of computer.
Another factor that should be taken into consideration is that present-day parents are not so passionate about teaching their children as the parents used to be in the past. In consequence, it leads to some changes in ways their children raise. The children would rely on themselves to learn various social and other skills. As a case in point, my younger brother, who is 9 now, is always searching through books and internet to find answer of his problems.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that nowadays, most of the younger people are better able to make decisions on their own. This is because of growing technology and because of decreasing parents' enthusiasm about tutoring their children.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, still, thus, i feel, in conclusion, in other words, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72527472527 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55182368708 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543956043956 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3187191627 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.176470588 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4117647059 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262492289375 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799499545343 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111302788667 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193185350709 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123103664632 0.0645574589148 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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