Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depend too much on their parents to make decisions for them,today young people are better able to make decisions for their own lives
Decision-making has been always a complicated and sophisticated process for human mind especially when is in its’ critical periods which is about 25 and in these periods brain is setting the first algorithms to find out how to make best and most efficient decisions with least negative consequences in the future. Nowadays because of changes in its environment particularly its social environment it have become more self-sufficient and also have been developed faster. Therefore, as far as I ‘m concerned I firmly contend that today young people are better to make decisions about their own life without help of their parents or other supporters. In what follows I will attempt to explicate my most discernible reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that in the past, young were much more dependent on their parents psychologically and financially. They had only their parents to talk about their decisions and problems and get consolations or advice about their predicaments that usually people at their young ages are in.They also could become financially independent later, when they were roughly in 30 decades of their life. For example I have an aunt whom she was living with my gran mother and grandfather until she became 36 and finally after laboriously looking for a job, she caught her desired job and became financially independent and left her family home.
Another reason which deserves some words here ids that these days the structures and infrastructures of society have immensely revolutionized to the point it is totally incomparable to the past to,put it more clear, the modern society provides and procures multitudinous opportunities for young to explore life and figure out what domains they have more propensity and talent to follow, to wit: they now have a broader and more accurate self-knowledge about themselves. For example my grand grandmother once was relating her story of career choosing she Saied she did not know what she wanted in her life when she was young because she had not experience any especial domain in university subjects and she chose her career just arbitrarily and out of mere chance.
To wrap it up all the aforementioned reasons lead us to this conclusion that today’s young are more independent in their decision-makings and I highly recommend to parents to trust them and let them do what they are more penchant for.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, look, so, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2015.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14030612245 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01415233114 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56887755102 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 20.1344086022 194% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 105.528005762 48.9658058833 216% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 201.5 100.406767564 201% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 39.2 20.6045352989 190% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326208905162 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1352115594 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109122203677 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212663508633 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085072731939 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.4 11.7677419355 190% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.89 58.1214874552 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 10.1575268817 182% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.0537634409 175% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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