Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By dawn of metropolis, people typically need to use different modes of transportation depending on their needs and ability to afford the expense. While the most expensive one is automobile, people still drive by their own cars. Therefore, when it come to the question whether there will be fewer cars in use than today in next twenty years, different people adopt different attitudes toward this question depending on their characters and educational backgrounds. There are people who adhere to the belief that cars will be more common in future since companies will produce cheaper and more convenient cars to fulfill variety of people’s expectations; on the other hand, others believe that public transportation will take the place of cars in near future. As far as I am personally concerned, the latter carries further weight since not only do people save their time and money but also do they reduce air pollution and protect environment.
Using public transportation has several benefits for people. First, people can save their time since there will be super fast subway metro which can transport people from place to place shorter than the time they need to drive by their car. Besides, they won’t be stuck to traffic congestion, become tired and late. Moreover, people can save money by using public transportation. In fact, public transportation will become cheaper as long as more people start to use it. Therefore, people can spend this money to purchase important stuffs. Furthermore, public transportation also gives people the chance to socialize with others and make new friends. Subsequently, the improvement in public transportation in next twenty years will encourage people to widely use them.
In addition, Public transportation has several benefit for the society. First, fewer cars in use mean having more blue sky during the year. In fact, there is a direct relation between the number of cars in use and air pollution. In other words, many cars mean more traffic congestion, more air pollution and more death. Then, if people want to have a beautiful city without air pollution, they should use public transportation instead of private cars in future. Apart from that, government can also save irreplaceable resources such as petroleum in order to be used in important affairs. Therefore, having a clean sky require people to use public transportation in near future.
To wrap it up, people will use fewer cars in next twenty years since it is helpful for individuals and the society as a whole. I think government have to increase the price of petrol in order to encourage people to use public transportation instead of their private cars, if they want to control air pollution and reduce traffic jam.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 248, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
...e by their own cars. Therefore, when it come to the question whether there will be f...
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Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...ir own cars. Therefore, when it come to the question whether there will be fewer cars in use than to...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...blic transportation will become cheaper as long as more people start to use it. Th...
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Line 5, column 40, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun benefit seems to be countable; consider using: 'several benefits'.
Suggestion: several benefits
... In addition, Public transportation has several benefit for the society. First, fewer cars in u...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... transportation instead of private cars in future. Apart from that, government can also s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, while, apart from, i think, in addition, in fact, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.0752688172 322% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14765100671 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84496917846 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465324384787 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2863486343 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.590909091 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3181818182 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172441111712 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625042911562 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539646140954 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126811056568 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183733607402 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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