Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should buy things made in their own country, even if they are more expensive than things made in other countries.
Purchasing is one of the most challenging issue in such modern era. In fact, there are various products with different qualities and cost which make purchasing difficult. On the one hand, people usually prefer to purchase products which are cheaper when the quality is the same no matter they have produced by their own country or other country, on the other hand, there are people who believe purchasing their own products will help industrial to be active whereby unemployment will decrease and indirectly effect their own life. As far as I am concerned, the later cases further weight on the account of following primary reasons.
Active industrial is the most important part of every modern country. Such active industrial comes from supporting the products which have been produced inside the country. In fact, if people purchase their own products, the rate of production will continue steadily and big companies will employ more employee in order to produce further products to satisfy more demand. Therefore, unemployment will decrease gradually. I remember the rate of unemployment was 20% in my country but when the government injected the idea of purchasing the products which have been made in our country between Iranian people, the rate of unemployment decrease to 8% after 10 years. Furthermore, 1000 big companies have been started to work in the last decade.
Competence will decrease the price and improve the quality. If people decide to purchase their own products rather than imported products, a competence will be created between internal companies in order to produce more whereby not only the price of products will decrease but also improve the quality. Therefore, people may purchase products with the same quality more expensive at first but in future they will buy high-quality products cheaper. For instance, there were few automobile company in Iran 20 years ago which produced automobile with same quality but more expensive than imported one and people didn’t like to purchase such automobile, therefore, Iran were full of imported automobile. One days, the government impose a strong law on importing automobile whereby the price of automobile increases drastically. Therefore, people induced to purchase Iranian automobiles. Such increasing demand encourage automobile companies to produce automobile even with more quality and cheaper than the past.
From economical point of view, such active industrial accompany with competence between companies will results in producing products which not only satisfy the internal demand but also they may be imported to foreign country. In fact, the quality and the price of products will improve as much as they may even compete with the same external products where by the rate of export will increase, the demand will increase, the unemployment will decrease and the welfare will improve. I remember 20 years ago Iranian people preferred to buy imported electronic devices but after 20 years Iranian companies are producing electronic devices which has less price and high-quality able to compete with the same external devices and this happen just because Iran government didn’t allow trader import electronic device.
All in all, as we mentioned above purchasing products which have been made inside the country makes an industrial active, decreases the rate of unemployment, creates competence between companies and all these factors brings about more powerful country which may be able to compete even with foreign countries. Although, as everyone knows, every coin has two side and one should contemplate the advantages and disadvantages of purchasing products which have been made in foreign countries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'One day', 'a day', or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: One day; A day; Days
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'result'
Suggestion: result
... with competence between companies will results in producing products which not only sa...
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Message: Did you mean 'whereby'?
Suggestion: whereby
...compete with the same external products where by the rate of export will increase, the d...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... which have been made inside the country makes an industrial active, decreases th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3134.0 1977.66487455 158% => OK
No of words: 578.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42214532872 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90322654589 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72297453946 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.397923875433 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 995.4 618.680645161 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.0676683749 48.9658058833 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.454545455 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2727272727 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31818181818 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165904197206 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535245958548 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450616783808 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106688036407 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298302530024 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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