Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Determining the best method for work is very important matter. Knowing how workers would work more efficiently helps companies and governments to find best solutions not only the public health but also the efficiency of companies. Some people may prefer two work three days per week while others would disagree. In my view, working five days per week for shorter hours is more advantageous because of two main reasons.
The main reason is that, in this method, workers can have fun each day at their free times. In this system, people will work almost eight hours a day. So taking eight hours of sleeping into account they would have eight hours a day to spend with their families and have fun with them. As a result, workers will be in the mood every day and will work enthusiastically. For example, I am currently working in research and innovation center of SAIPA, the most well-known car manufacturing company in my country, where I work eight hours a day for five days. Every day, in the evenings, I do lots of things, I go out with my friends, go out with my girlfriend and so on. Furthermore, at the weekend I also have two days to have some trips near the city. As you can see, in this method, I can have fun each day and also at the weekends.
The second reason is that, when one works for long hours a day he/she would be exhausted and the efficiency would decay. People have limited amount of energy and efficiency, so if they had to work for long hours a day after few hours they would be tired and even sleepy so they would not do their jobs in the best way they can. For example, in a period of time when I was constructing a test rig for a company, I had to work for long hours and so after hours I was getting extremely tired. I worked for days but I was not successful until I changed the method and worked for shorter periods. This led me to finally manufacture the device and to earn a lot of money. I also did not have sufficient time to deal with other thing in my life, my family and health included, which had caused me lots of problems in my personal life. This experience thought me that, working for long hours is not a appropriate method for me.
In sum, though some may disagree with my opinion, I deeply believe that working for five days with shorter hours is the best method to work. Not only do it increases the efficiency of workers but also they have time to have fun every day. Companies should think of their own profits and also their worker's health and try to execute the five-day method.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 147, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'find the best'.
Suggestion: find the best
...ntly helps companies and governments to find best solutions not only the public health bu...
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Line 5, column 347, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...he best way they can. For example, in a period of time when I was constructing a test rig for ...
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Line 5, column 892, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... me that, working for long hours is not a appropriate method for me. In sum, th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, may, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2066.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39574468085 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38772703219 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434042553191 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0853428418 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9090909091 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3636363636 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398941765351 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131307439331 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649614105685 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258845106264 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177427353894 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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